1. Some people believe that universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. Others believe that universities should not force students to take any courses other than those that will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented’.
The author of the issue propounds that there are two viewpoints about the content of syllabus which is provided for the students in the university. While one school believes that students should gain the various fields even the irrelevant topics to their field of study; the other group emphasizes the more focused study which aligns to the students’ field of study. In what follows, I will list the possible rearing reasons for both sides, and finally, I will posit my standpoint.
The group which asks for the wide program with the different courses may value the importance of multi-dimensional person which has a wide understanding from his surroundings. Since, human according to his knowledge and ability can become a one-dimensional person, having knowledge and information about the various fields is effective for the people to avoid this event. Therefore, a comprehensive schedule at the university will present this wide-ranged platform to gain different perspectives and interact with the different fields at the same time. A person with this background will know about everything and can make a connection with various fields; consequently, the possibility of solo-dimensional person will be decreased.
On the other hand, as mentioned, there is another group which emphasizes a more sophisticated program which aligns completely to student’s field of study. This group may weigh the chance of employment after graduation. According to noteworthy, intelligent research conducted by the Psychology Department at Tehran University, the chance of employment has the fifty-five percent increment with good background at the education. In this scenario, a sophisticated plan which prepares entirely for his future affair is a wise plan for warranting the students for their future life.
If I have to pick a side, the second group is the one with which I mostly concur. First of all, the considered reason by this group is plausible and reasonable; besides, I have one more reason for my perspective. The study at the university especially in the graduate-level is really tough stuff and requires full concentration and effort from the student to become successful. This gets more emphasize when we considered a short period of education at the university. In this case, the centralization of all energy and time to the field of study is a rational task. As far as, the student does divide his concentration, time, and energy on the other unfitting course, he will have more chance of excelling his stand in his education and future employment.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, finally, first, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, while, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 408.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29901960784 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16198889614 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497549019608 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5089633363 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.176470588 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173068229895 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0544709130468 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066808279527 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117661434846 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683331701772 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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