Some people believe that universities should require every student to take a variety
of courses outside the student's field of study. Others believe that universities
should not force students to take any courses other than those that will help
prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own
position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
Education is a key that not only changes a person’s perspective but it also helps shape future of his/her family. The prompt discusses two views in which few people believe that universities should require every student to take courses outside student’s field of study while others believe that they shouldn’t allow students to take courses outside those that will bring them jobs. I think that students should be allowed to take courses outside their field of study due to two reasons.
It is possible that the subjects outside area of study may inspire students to look at their subjects in different perspective or help them solve issues of real life using combination of both subjects. For example, a student chooses his/her area of expertise to be Engineering and the university allows students to choose any subject outside their field study and the student chooses biology as this additional subject. There is a possibility that while discussing few concepts of engineering he/she can come up with a solution that builds a simple equipment that can help detect people if they are having symptoms of a particular disease at early stage which he/she learnt in his/her biology class which will help people to get this disease treated at early stage and avoid complications. So it is possible that these additional subjects outside field of study may help students to get inspired and get more understanding in their area of expertise.
Every student gives careful consideration while choosing field of study, however it is possible that there are few things which have not been considered by student. For example, a student is very good at logic building and analytical thinking, due to which he/she chooses computer programming as the major. However, after studying the subject he/she realizes that the course he too much technical and is not suitable for him/her. In this case if the course is designed in such a way that there are subjects related to that course only then it becomes difficult for the student and he/she may decide to leave the course and pursue something of his/her interest or continue choosing the same course which he/she doesn’t like and don’t do well in career! However, if he/she had the opportunity to explore few courses which are outside of the field of study then he/she might have the chance to understand his/her likes and dislikes and can make informed decision to choose the area of expertise and hence the relevant course.
One might argue that it shouldn’t happen that student is learning more about other studies rather than the field of study he/she has chosen and hence are not able to learn the skillsets of the field of study. However, I believe that universities should allow students to choose 3-4 electives and rest all courses shall be related to field of study.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...es careful consideration while choosing field of study, however it is possible that t...
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Line 5, column 839, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ore few courses which are outside of the field of study then he/she might have th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, may, so, then, well, while, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.3162921348 212% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 69.0 33.0505617978 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 472.0 442.535393258 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01694915254 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53859535747 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453389830508 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 731.7 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 130.334390145 60.3974514979 216% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 182.153846154 118.986275619 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.3076923077 23.4991977007 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53846153846 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395465881195 0.243740707755 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.173859065585 0.0831039109588 209% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155648761842 0.0758088955206 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300370226802 0.150359130593 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.164478255297 0.0667264976115 246% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 14.1392134831 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.94 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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