Some people claim that you can tell whether a nation is great by looking at the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists. Others argue that the surest indicator of a great nation is, in fact, the general welfare of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
A great nation is the amalgamation of the achievements and welfare index of their citizens. we cant be biased on any side whether its achievements or welfare. Because these two factors are two flip side of a coin. So a balanced scenario should be the perfect way to generalize the greatness of a country.
In a country if the people are getting all the basic amenities with ease, their work culture is nice,then they can converge their energy to eleviate their motherland, whether in the field of science, medical, arts or government sector.An annual report has been published every year by Amnesty international on living index, and ranking has been given to all the countries. Currently Norway is leading that list. This list defines that how better are the living condition of people in the area.
Moving to another side of the coin, technological development leads to an ease of living, with the help of machines difficult task can be done without any strenous effort.This saves time, energy and workforce whivh can be efficiently used in other innovative jobs.For instance before the invention of computer ,the banking sector is completely based on paper, cheques,drafts. Complex calculations, and ledger,and other daily clerical works have to be done by human intervention.And as we know, the probablity of mistakes or redundancy with humans with respect to computers is somehow high.
we can therefore summarise that nation becomes great with the perception of their people.If citizen of a country are living a healthy and prosporous life, they will get the feeling pride for their country, and they get zeal to do something countable for their nation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, therefore, for instance, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1409.0 2235.4752809 63% => OK
No of words: 272.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18014705882 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89313475284 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621323529412 0.4932671777 126% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 124.925617869 60.3974514979 207% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 140.9 118.986275619 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160420788735 0.243740707755 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669310004134 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645827807389 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992262505109 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602770531351 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.85 8.38706741573 117% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.