Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
The author claims that the sports stars and movie stars are obliged to behave as role models for the young people who look upto them an in return of the millions of dollars that they are paud, they are expected to fulfill societal responsibility. I agree with the author's claim of stars being the role model for the young people have to obliged to behave in a proper conduct. However, I believe it should not be related to the money they receive.
Movie stars, sports stars and many public figures play a huge role in influencing young people.Young minds are often attracted by their speaking skill, dialouges, humor, determination, hardwork etc. There are many example where these stars through their exceptionally unique and attractive skills have become role models for young kids. But with the increase in popularity come the inrease in responsibility. Knowing that many eyes are on them, these stars are obliged to behave in a way so the people who look upto them don't feel let down.
Considering an examle of a very successful swimmer who is looked upto my many other young swimmers. Not just his performance in the games, but the social and cultural behaviour also plays a huge role. Any contrversies about him might disappoint the people who look upto him. Thus, it can be said that these public figures need to be very cautious about what the say, how they behave and how they peoform in their respective fields.
However, we must not forget that irrespective of the popularity, every individual has his/her independent lives. The inner character of a person actually determines who he/she actually is. The claim that in return to the money they are paid, they must fulfill the societal responsibility is not fully correct. It is true that there is a societal responsibily but it should not be linked with the pay they recieve for their professsion for it is their profession and hardwork that has lead to the popularity.
The role models help shaping the minds of young people who look upto them so it becomes very important that their behaviour and actions are such that they donot create a negative impact on these young minds. However, linking money to this reponsibility is something I disagee to.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Young
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun example seems to be countable; consider using: 'many examples'.
Suggestion: many examples
... determination, hardwork etc. There are many example where these stars through their excepti...
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Suggestion: don't
... a way so the people who look upto them dont feel let down. Considering an examl...
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to shape' or 'shape'.
Suggestion: to shape; shape
...he popularity. The role models help shaping the minds of young people who look upto...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, look, so, thus, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 12.9106741573 8% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86807387863 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61238505261 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490765171504 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3180052945 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.529411765 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2941176471 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.29411764706 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.506887877806 0.243740707755 208% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14427375837 0.0831039109588 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157082522831 0.0758088955206 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274643023053 0.150359130593 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170206679443 0.0667264976115 255% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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