“If we want to save money on municipal garbage disposal fees, we need to encourage our residents to recycle more. Late last year, our neighboring town, Hayesworth, passed a law requiring that all households recycle paper and glass, or pay a fine. Since that time, Hayesworth has seen its garbage disposal costs significantly decrease. If we implemented an advertising campaign encouraging our residents to recycle, Masontown would also save money on disposal of its waste.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The editorial states that the money on the municipal garbage disposal fees can be saved if the residents are encouraged to recycle more.For this if an advertising campaign is implemented to encourage people, Mason town would be able to save more money on disposal of it's waste. There is also an example of a neighbouring town giver fo supporting the claim. This is indeed a very good idea not only by the economical point of view but also by the environmental point of view. However, inorder to ensure it's effectiveness it is necessary that we have clarity about many other criterias.
Firstly, certain comparisions between the two towns should be made inorder to ensure that the technique that worked for Hayesworth would work in the same manner for Masontown. Different towns might have different kinds of people living, different strategies and different outcomes.There must be clarifications about the population of both the towns, the amount and the kind of waste generated by both the towns. Also, what is the main source of waste in these towns. It is possible that the waste from pharma or manufacturing industries is higher than the waste from the households. Hence, such information is necessary.
Secondly, encouraging people through advertising campaigns may not gaurantee that the people will adopt the idea of recycling the waste. One must be aware of the ways in which paper and glass waste can be reused or recycled. Education regarding this can prove to be beneficial to the residents.
Other methods like providing incentives for recycling the household items can be provided to encourage recycling.Also. establising a business of the products made from recycling the materials, like decoratives pieces from broken glass, can help to improve the economy of the town.
Thus, even if the same stategy proved to be effective for the other town does not necessarily mean that it will be effective for masontown too. Rather, one must think of other alternatives that help to reduce the cost on disposal of waste.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 336 350
No. of Characters: 1661 1500
No. of Different Words: 179 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.281 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.943 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.79 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 103 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.621 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.071 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...esidents are encouraged to recycle more.For this if an advertising campaign is impl...
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Line 3, column 282, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...erent strategies and different outcomes.There must be clarifications about the popula...
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Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rove to be beneficial to the residents. Other methods like providing incentives ...
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Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
... can be provided to encourage recycling.Also. establising a business of the products...
^^^^
Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: As well
... can be provided to encourage recycling.Also. establising a business of the products...
^^^^
Line 7, column 114, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... can be provided to encourage recycling.Also. establising a business of the products...
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Line 7, column 120, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Establising
...e provided to encourage recycling.Also. establising a business of the products made from re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 334.0 441.139720559 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10179640719 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88970397139 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544910179641 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4337804062 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.5 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.70786347227 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152639877365 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0433339449132 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630871416886 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0851066619935 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668801178317 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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