“Techcorporation is our top pick for investment this term. We urge all of our clients to invest in this new company. For the first time in ten years, a company that has developed satellite technology has been approved by the FTA to compete with the current satellite provider. That company is Techcorporation. A consumer survey last year indicated that over eighty percent of respondents were dissatisfied with the current satellite television provider and would want to switch to another provider if the industry were not a monopoly. Thus, the new venture of Techcorporation into satellite television will prove to be highly profitable for those who invest now.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
The newsletter advice claims that a comapany Techcorporation is their top pick for investment and urges people to invest in that company. The reason behind this stated in the article is that there are 8% of people who are dissatisfied with the current srvice provider and also that this company has been apprved by the FTA t compete with the current satellite provider. Thus people who invest in this new venture have a high chance of getting great profits. I feel that the article lacks certain clarities and the conclusion that one will be profitted or not can only be drawn after having certain clarities.
Firstly, who published the advice to the investors in the newsletter? If it is a nutral person who studies and analyzes that market regularly and publishes his/her views, it can be considered. But if this article is published by someone related to the Techcorporation itself, the credibility is doubted for there can be a bias. Similarly, what and which population was surveyed?
Secondly, what were the dissatifactions of the 80% of respondants? Is the new Techcorporation venture able to meet with those dissatisfactions? What is different to that of the current service provider that will help to fulfill the demands of people? Unless the Techcorporation has come up with a new and innovative technology, it cannot be confirmed that it will prove to be better than the current service provider.
Thirdly, the article states that it is for the first time in 10 years that a company has develpoped satellite technology that FTA has approved. How old it the current satellite company and how has the consumers response been over the years? If consumers over the years are happy with the service provided, there is a possibility that very few might want to switch to the new service provider.
Finally, there is a need to describe the ways in which the new service provider company, Techcorporation is different from the current service provider. Taking into account all the positive and negative impacts, it can be known that the Techcorporation is a safe company to invest or not.
Thus, unless all the above mentioned concerns are claified, one cannot draw a conclusion that investment in the new venture, Techcorporation, will surely turn out to be profitable to thse who invest in it.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1872 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.837 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.903 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.421 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.316 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 202, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'consumers'' or 'consumer's'?
Suggestion: consumers'; consumer's
...rrent satellite company and how has the consumers response been over the years? If consum...
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Line 7, column 340, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[6]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun might seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'little might'.
Suggestion: little might
...vided, there is a possibility that very few might want to switch to the new service provi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, third, thirdly, thus, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99481865285 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99513686747 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468911917098 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.7002524645 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.111111111 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61111111111 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31982873402 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945803580003 0.0743258471296 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875121286537 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153743096474 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0871084764452 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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