Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Young people need role models because they condition them to behave in socially appropriate and approved ways. This is logical because role models are the individuals we see most often. Because movie stars are frequently in the media, we would like to believe that they are suited to behave as a child's role model. However, it is inane to believe that, because we are surrounded by sports and movie stars, they are apt for such a position; we should expect them only to entertain us.
Asking sports and movie stars to behave as role models is unfair because we are asking them to do something not required of them. Regardless of how much money we pay them, they are not suddenly social figures in our lives. Expecting them to fulfill an additional societal responsibility is equivalent to asking a coworker to work the late shift or come to work early; he or she is completing tasks otherwise not asked of him or her. They are not being paid to be social figures; they are being paid to entertain us, just as a coworker is being paid to complete exactly what is asked of him or her.
We cannot ask them to behave as role models if we do not first establish a clearly-defined ideal of what a role model is. In other words, the idea of a "role model" is ambiguous. What does it mean to behave as a role model? Do they speak out against injustices? Or should they solely volunteer? Should being a "role model" be an amalgam of activities? If we are even to say that they "have an obligation to behave as role models," then we need to have a clear idea of what being a role model is. Until then, we cannot expect anything of them.
Most importantly, we cannot expect them to serve as role models when they act ambivalently with regard to social, economic, and environmental issues. Although Leonardo de Caprio is outspoken toward environmental issues, he owns multiple coal- and gas-based energized homes. There is the case of Alex Rodriguez, who abused steroids while playing in the MLB. Are these the individuals we expect to behave as role models, when they show differing attitudes toward what being a role model is? Not only can we not expect sports and movie stars to not behave as role models because we do not even have a consensus of what a role model is but we cannot expect them because they do not appropriately in the first place.
Sports and movie stars are clearly not appropriate to behave as role models. They are not asked to be such, and we first need to have clearly-defined ideas of what a role model is. And even then, our "role models" need to act consistently. Rather than deluding ourselves into believing that sports and movie stars are best fit to serve as role models, we should expect more of society's scientists, doctors, and professors omnipresent in our lives to serve as such. We need to put more effort into making the already-present present role models in our lives be more present--more present than the sports and movie stars.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e model is. In other words, the idea of a 'role model' is ambiguous. Wh...
^
Line 5, column 319, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...uld they solely volunteer? Should being a 'role model' be an amalgam of...
^
Line 5, column 454, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
...e an obligation to behave as role models,' then we need to have a clear idea of w...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, then, while, in other words, with regard to, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.5258426966 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 33.0505617978 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2483.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 530.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68490566038 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79809637944 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.708412195 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.411320754717 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 805.5 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4126383031 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3846153846 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 5.21951772744 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401915765546 0.243740707755 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13007629287 0.0831039109588 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0782654794923 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252213817822 0.150359130593 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0501338282048 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.