Sports stars and movies stars have an obligation to behave properly, as role models for young people who look up to them
Today's stars are high adulated and deified by the young, who want to become just like them. I agree with the promt that Sports stars and movies stars have an obligation to behave properly, as role models for young people who look up to them. Following are two reasons and a concession to support this thesis.
Firstly, the sports stars and movie stars receive a lot of adulation by the young poeple, they are considered to be the heroes, and the trend setters. They introduce the new quirky trends in terms of music, fashion, behaviour etc. And, they are ones who actually create an impact over the young minds, which are naive and gullible, unable to distinguish between right and wrong. Therefore, it important for these stars to maintain a correct image, and endorse progressive elements of the society. Even though, we have seen in our society that, these celebrities are used by politicians for promoting the their election campaign. Thus, they should be really carefull as their support might bring a drastic change in the country. Apart, from this the should always publicise iconocalstic views, which might not be acrimonious to anyone. For instance, Kyrie Irving, a famous basketballer gave anti-semitic agruments in an interview, and he faced a lot of backlash as him views might perceived by young as a gospel. Thus, it is of paramount importance for the these stars to maintain a propers decorum, and promote progressiveness in the society.
Secondly, as these stars have a huge deals with big brands, sensationalizing orthodox or harmful elements would be toxic for them as well. There are a lot of examples of musicians promotic drug abuse in their songs, and getting banned or getting frowned upon, consequently, receiving less attention by critics and public. Therefore, as they should be vigilant enough to know, what effects their action and statements might have over their reputation. For example, Will Smith a famous actor across globe, lost his control and slapped the host at Oscars. This resulted in a lot of backlash against him, and due to this he lost a lot deals and promotions, which turned out to be finaicially debalitating. Thus, the sports and movies start should be cautious with their actions, and aware of the consequences they might have on their future.
Thridly, some people, in some specific circumstances and considerations, argue that the stars have their own idiosyncratic belief and should undertake any action which please them. It is agreeable that a person should maintain her or her stance or belief system, and has all the freedom to do that. But, with this great power comes great responsibility, the person freedom shoould not affect the someone else's emotions or belief systems. Therefore, it important to maintain a neutral stance infront of the cameras and while giving statements publicly.
Conclusively, it is important for these stars to promote utopian and progressive beliefs and actions, as they are high deified by young, and will have an impact on them. Apart from this, it will also be financially advisable for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 14.8657303371 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 33.0505617978 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2582.0 2235.4752809 116% => OK
No of words: 511.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05283757339 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74441728632 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 215.323595506 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516634050881 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 775.8 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8049528357 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.583333333 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2916666667 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 5.21951772744 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362181440926 0.243740707755 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100209682892 0.0831039109588 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.163291529109 0.0758088955206 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.24146553811 0.150359130593 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.201265417358 0.0667264976115 302% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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