Sports stars & movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect them to fulfill this societal responsibility.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing & supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Many people look up to sports and movie stars and even adulate them. In return,these stars have an obligation towards their fans and followers to inspire and motivate them. This is a healthy practice as it leads to the development of new talent.
Some of the young talents are often stopped from following their passion of sports or movies.In many countries, education is considered to be the top priority and not much attention is given to sports or movies. Often,sports and movies are considered to be a risky profession and thus many people are apprehensive of pursuing a career in sports or movies.Therefore, we require role models who can guide these young talents in the right direction .This becomes a social responsibility of these stars to inspire more and more people .
It is their duty to be inspiring as a role model not only because they have to return the millions of dollars that they have earned,but also because it is their moral obligation towards the development of sports or art.For example, Sachin Tendulkar, who is a World renowned cricketer would be a role model to millions of people not because of the money that he earns , he would rather do so because he wants more people to take up cricket as a profession and ultimately benefit the country in the World cup.Similarly,any artist or a movie star must motivate young talents because as a part of the art community it is their duty to work towards the betterment of art and movies.
In conclusion ,money should not be the only incentive for a star to behave as a role model.Rather,they have a moral obligation to do so.Ultimately, as a role model they should inspire,motivate and galvanize young talents for the development of sports and arts.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'look', 'similarly', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.26397515528 0.240241500013 110% => OK
Verbs: 0.155279503106 0.157235817809 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0683229813665 0.0880659088768 78% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0434782608696 0.0497285424764 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0590062111801 0.0444667217837 133% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.111801242236 0.12292977631 91% => OK
Participles: 0.027950310559 0.0406280797675 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.03312641714 2.79330140395 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0434782608696 0.030933414821 141% => OK
Particles: 0.00621118012422 0.0016655270985 373% => OK
Determiners: 0.105590062112 0.0997080785238 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0186335403727 0.0249443105267 75% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00621118012422 0.0148568991511 42% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1727.0 2732.02544248 63% => OK
No of words: 298.0 452.878318584 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.79530201342 6.0361032391 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.58838876751 91% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.322147651007 0.366273622748 88% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.244966442953 0.280924506359 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.151006711409 0.200843997647 75% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.120805369128 0.132149295362 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03312641714 2.79330140395 109% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 219.290929204 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.459731543624 0.48968727796 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 44.553844471 55.4138127331 80% => OK
How many sentences: 7.0 20.6194690265 34% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 42.5714285714 23.380412469 182% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 198.23568739 59.4972553346 333% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 246.714285714 141.124799967 175% => OK
Words per sentence: 42.5714285714 23.380412469 182% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 0.674092028746 191% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.21349557522 364% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 67.0680728667 51.4728631049 130% => OK
Elegance: 1.56626506024 1.64882698954 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.466329120224 0.391690518653 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.23770726583 0.123202303941 193% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.127474159272 0.077325440228 165% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.764462662252 0.547984918172 140% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.199678251687 0.149214159877 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.254740386904 0.161403998019 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556711133219 0.0892212321368 62% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.380151243531 0.385218514788 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0323483269875 0.0692045440612 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.321935328806 0.275328986314 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0293196420737 0.0653680567796 45% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.4325221239 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.30420353982 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88274336283 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 7.22455752212 55% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.70907079646 37% => OK
Total topic words: 5.0 13.5995575221 37% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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