The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but the general well-being of all its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Over the years, research have recorded that the progress of a nation is seen in the happiness and well-being of its citizens. This prompt states that the general well-being of people is the surest indicator of a great nation and not its leader’s achievements. I mostly agree with this suggestion for two reasons which I will elucidate below, but I do concede that it might be sometimes hard to please people of a particular nation.
To begin with, the well-being of people should be the highest priority of a leader because citizens are like the heartbeat of the country that when it stops functioning, every other thing becomes inactive (dead). For instance, a country being led by an altruist leader who cares more about the well-fare of its members will definitely promote unity, tranquility, and cooperation among its followers. Also, this will attract inter-national relationship and businesses because everyone likes to be in a place where there is harmony. Countries will be very confident to establish businesses in such a nation and there will be a strong opposition against intruders who aims are for destruction because “united a nation stand, divided the fall”.
Furthermore, the altitude of a leader towards its citizens tells a lot about the nation in which he rules and also, determines who respect its citizens wherever they go because “if the head is bad, the body is automatically bad” and vice versa. For instance, a leader who runs to nations for medical treatment without establishing standard medical centers in his own country has created a bad name for the nation because foreigners will look down on the ruler citizens thereby resulting in hatred and discrimination. There is for a leader to hold its followers on high esteem so as to promote the economic and social growth of the nation
On the contrary, pleasing people can be sometimes difficult because of the complexity of human behavior. For example, citizens might begin to take the leaders simplicity and altruism for weakness and stupidity by always demanding personal needs from the ruler thereby making becoming lazy and parasitic.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 577, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...er to hold its followers on high esteem so as to promote the economic and social growth ...
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Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'leaders'' or 'leader's'?
Suggestion: leaders'; leader's
...ample, citizens might begin to take the leaders simplicity and altruism for weakness an...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1788.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12320916905 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84085536267 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558739255014 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 23.0359550562 135% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.2524513534 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 162.545454545 118.986275619 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7272727273 23.4991977007 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.81818181818 5.21951772744 188% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228928779922 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108017280909 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736493513687 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151157213902 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0961665432813 0.0667264976115 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.1392134831 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.8420337079 82% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.2143820225 128% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.