Teachers' salaries should be based on the academic performance of their students.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developi

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Teachers' salaries should be based on the academic performance of their students.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

The recommendation as prescribed seems to be quite flawed and illogical to a certain extent as one can conspicuously figure out that distributing salaries to teachers solely based on the academic performance is not at all a good idea from the feasibility point of view as the volatility in the academic performance of the students in different sessions will hinder from dispensing a stable income to the teachers in schools.This recommendation is sure to collapse when presented to the committee . So, reframing the recommendation by introducing the role of academic matters to certain limited extent in approving the desired salary to a teacher may help in getting some interest from the committee.

Firstly,the idea that the salaries of teachers should be based on a certain volatile aspect is clearly not practical because the teachers being humans do expect a stability in their career with will surely be adversely affected by such a decision and as a result the teachers may need to protest against such scheme when presented in public forum . Moreover , due to other aspects that involve money in the personal lives of teachers they tend to work only when they could see the security in terms of source of income . This insecurity if not taken care off may lead to lower retention capacity of the teacher in the school which certainly will affect the students in an adverse way as most importantly the schools are dealing with the children who will become the part of the workforce in coming future.

Secondly,depending simply upon the academic performance to weigh the salaries is quite sluggish because various other factors do come into the picture when one considers academic performance which certainly depends on the ability of the teacher to teach the students effectively though but at the same time the period of time that has been provided to deliver that concerned course do play a certain role and the relevance of the subject also matters which can make or break the scorecards of the students . Taking an example of two different courses like science and physical education , if the above recommendation has been put into effect then one may end up with allocating larger salary to physical education teacher than a science teacher but here what one is ignoring that this will adversely effect the education policy which aims to equip the children to face the outer world as at the same time science is also necessary in the outer world .

So in closing this analysis of the validity of the above recommendation , i would likke to outrightly reject such an idea which even if framed would hopefully please only an ounce of the committee members . As the recommendation is quite controversial in nature which will make the entire recommendation implacable to be implemented.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04956896552 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91367208976 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491379310345 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 23.0359550562 221% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 137.190864613 60.3974514979 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 260.333333333 118.986275619 219% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.5555555556 23.4991977007 219% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.44444444444 5.21951772744 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 7.80617977528 256% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209161282345 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0919048357795 0.0831039109588 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421111890568 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129054740361 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0206226612715 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.1 14.1392134831 199% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.71 48.8420337079 40% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 12.1743820225 191% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.9 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 31.5 11.8971910112 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 11.2143820225 200% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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