Teachers' salaries should be based on their students' academic performance.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most
compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
teachers play a crucial role in building future of the students. The prompt suggests that the teachers’ salaries should be based on their students’ academic performance. however, I disagree with this statement due to following two reasons.
First of all, every student is different and only academic performance does not define children’s aptitude. different students have inclination towards different subjects due to their proclivity to that subject. For instance, a particular student might be very good at Maths but might be terrible at history or vice versa. So in this case if the student performs terribly in history even after all the efforts by the history teacher and the student then teacher is not at fault since these parameters are not in teacher’s hands. Therefore, in my opinion it will not be fair for teachers to link their salary with the academic performance of the students.
Secondly, a person performs best if he/she is not under pressure of any kind. The pressure of having monetary income linked to the students performance may make the situation worse for teacher. The teacher may focus only on getting good grades for students rather than sharing the knowledge that they have. In worse and hypothetical condition, there is a possibility that teacher may use some unethical techniques to achieve good grades of the class. For example teaching or focusing only on the questions which will appear on tests. these conditions will result in poor evaluation of the students which in future may spoil their future. hence, it is not right to base teacher’s salary on students’ grades.
One might say that if the salary of teachers’ is based on the academic results of the students then teachers will pay extra attention to students which will benefit students. however, this will give rise to a system which will be majorly focused on academics & grades rather than students’ understanding of the subject. hence I strongly disagree that there should be any kind of interconnection between the salary & students’ grades.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, after all, for example, for instance, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 333.0 442.535393258 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23423423423 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80523013424 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510510510511 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2081175674 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.8333333333 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28698138102 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104616833806 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0727233352676 0.0758088955206 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202170267172 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410639769658 0.0667264976115 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.