Some people believe that scientific discoveries have given us a much better understanding of the world around us Others believe that science has revealed to us that the world is infinitely more complex than we ever realized Write a response in which you d | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people believe that scientific discoveries have given us a much better
understanding of the world around us. Others believe that science has revealed to
us that the world is infinitely more complex than we ever realized.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own
position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and
supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Science is nothing but understanding of the world. It captures everything starting from small atom to entire universe, covers understanding biology to understanding the psychology & behavior. The prompt depicts two views on the understanding of the science in which few people believe that Science helps us to understand the universe better and others believe that it has just increased the complexities that we are not required to know. In my opinion, science’s contribution in the human evolution is far great and has definitely helped us understand the universe in a better way due to following reasons.
Humans are gifted with intelligence and the core nature that is expected out of human is to be curious and find answers to these curiosities. Due to this curiosity, we are able to achieve so many things throughout the history. This curiosity has helped us from making our own fire and weapons with the help of externally available things to building rocket to understand the universe and the associated planets and stars. This development has helped mankind in various things starting from finding cure for the disease which once destroyed the majority of the population, understanding the function of our own body & it’s various parts, building efficient methods to earn food , ability to travel across the globe in very less time, forecasting the weather, come up with improved modes of entertainment, communicate with people across world within seconds and what not! I am writing this essay here and some person sitting across the world will evaluate my understanding of the topic and this amazing thing is possible only and only because of science. Science has helped us to understand and predict each and every activity that goes in surrounding, so that we are better prepared for any kind of future implications. It definitely has helped us understand universe better and helped us solve many problems.

On the other hand, few people believe that we are getting knowledge which is not necessary for us. What will we do by understanding how Mars or Jupiter works? How does understanding of small organism affects our life? Let’s assume that our ancestor would have asked the same question and would have stopped there then we would have been living in the same old life that they have lived. Suppose someone from past would have thought, I don’t care about how energy works, why wind blows or why water runs in a river then maybe we would not have different source of energies today which we are utilizing to have electricity at our homes, drive the cars to work rather than walking or use all the factory manufactured items which eases our life which runs on this energy. Sure, the understanding of the entire universe is very complex in it’s original form but being ignorant to it is not solution to our problem. Universe has been complex even before origin of human beings and it is a fact, however not trying to understand how it works in not correct. In contrary, trying to understand it better in order to efficiently use the resources available will make our life easier.

Therefore, keeping in mind above points, I think that Science though complex in it’s own nature has helped us in various ways and has made our life easier. Being ignorant and selective about these curiosities will not help us now and in future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 617, Rule ID: ITS_JJ_NNSNN[27]
Message: Did you mean 'its various parts'?
Suggestion: its various parts
...standing the function of our own body & it’s various parts, building efficient methods to earn foo...
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Line 2, column 676, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... building efficient methods to earn food , ability to travel across the globe in v...
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Line 4, column 832, Rule ID: ABOUT_ITS_NN[25]
Message: Did you mean 'in its original'?
Suggestion: in its original
... of the entire universe is very complex in it’s original form but being ignorant to it is not so...
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Line 4, column 835, Rule ID: IT_IS[18]
Message: Did you mean 'its' (possessive pronoun) instead of 'it's' (=it is)?
Suggestion: its
... the entire universe is very complex in it’s original form but being ignorant to it ...
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Line 4, column 835, Rule ID: ITS_JJ_NNSNN[27]
Message: Did you mean 'its original form'?
Suggestion: its original form
... the entire universe is very complex in it’s original form but being ignorant to it is not solutio...
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Line 4, column 1089, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
...t. In contrary, trying to understand it better in order to efficiently use the resourc...
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Line 6, column 81, Rule ID: IT_IS[13]
Message: Did you mean 'its' (possessive pronoun) instead of 'it's' (=it is)?
Suggestion: its
... I think that Science though complex in it’s own nature has helped us in various way...
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Line 6, column 235, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...se curiosities will not help us now and in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, i think, kind of, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2793.0 2235.4752809 125% => OK
No of words: 563.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96092362345 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70412521878 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 215.323595506 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495559502664 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 879.3 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 129.483695885 60.3974514979 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 139.65 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.15 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297563914912 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103189516962 0.0831039109588 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859163209289 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193795791818 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0709427428832 0.0667264976115 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.1392134831 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, i think, kind of, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this: