“Technology and the human activity that goes with it inevitably leads to greater pollution and environmental damage.”
The topic raises a issue that the progressing technology and human activities goes with it result into the increase in pollution and enviromental damage. This topic has both sides, but if speaking in broader since and by looking at the past record, technological progress significantly contributed to increase in pollution and enviromental damage.Conversely we should not forget that technology also helped us to reduce pollution and other enviromental harm.
The tremendous progress in the field of science and technology in a very short span of time leads to ever increasing polution and enviromental haphazard. The technology facilities and helped the human being to progress but also slowly detorated the planet earth. For example, If we talk about the invention of vechile, It not only decreased the travel time to a much larger extent also helped humans to travel beyond there capabilites and explore new things. But with ever increasing automative technology, we have to face serious problem such as air pollution,traffic congestion, decrease in oil reserve, ocean pollution and so on. So the no. of vechile user in being increasing on large scale. Therefore, not only technological advancement but also human activity by exploiting the technology leads to increasing in pollution and enviromental damage.
As human slowly got aware of the fact that, technological advancement leads to increase in enviromental damage and pollution, Scientist and inovator trying to more focus on developing technology more eco-friendly.If we look at the same example of autmation technology, we can observe that, technologies advancement is going on by keeping in mind its enviromental effect.Vechile have been designed and devloped based on cng and now also on electricity.The techological shift will not rapid and also not decrease in pollution. But gradual it will help in overall improving the enviromental condition.
Therefore,tough over the year technlogy and human activities leads to increase in pollution and enviromental damage, but know it slowly also leaned toward developing technology with ascepts of reducing pollution and envirmental damage.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
The topic raises a issue that the progressing technology a...
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Suggestion: Conversely
...se in pollution and enviromental damage.Conversely we should not forget that technology al...
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Line 1, column 348, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Conversely,
...se in pollution and enviromental damage.Conversely we should not forget that technology al...
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Suggestion: , traffic
...ce serious problem such as air pollution,traffic congestion, decrease in oil reserve, oc...
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Suggestion: If
...developing technology more eco-friendly.If we look at the same example of autmatio...
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Suggestion: Vechile
...keeping in mind its enviromental effect.Vechile have been designed and devloped based o...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ased on cng and now also on electricity.The techological shift will not rapid and a...
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Suggestion: , tough
...g the enviromental condition. Therefore,tough over the year technlogy and human activ...
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Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[4]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
... pollution and enviromental damage, but know it slowly also leaned toward developing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, if, look, so, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1825.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 328.0 442.535393258 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56402439024 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.34650984208 2.79657885939 120% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518292682927 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 129.475517849 60.3974514979 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 152.083333333 118.986275619 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3333333333 23.4991977007 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248349774808 0.243740707755 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110938935774 0.0831039109588 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113131722267 0.0758088955206 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190985731735 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0773539332516 0.0667264976115 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 14.1392134831 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 48.8420337079 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.