There is little justification for society to make extraordinary efforts—especially at a great cost in money and jobs—to save endangered animal or plant species.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
As the Earth is getting old it is evolving too. Most of the species in this planet evolve according to the changes happening. But, there are some species which do not evolve and hence get endangered or even extinct due to this natural process. According to me, Making an extraordinary effort, especially at a great cost in money and jobs to save endangered animal and plant species is not a good idea.
To begin with, there are many animal and plant species which get endangered due to natural circumstances. We live i a world of food chain and the survival of the fittest. Let's take an example of a forest where all types of animals and plants exist. If an endangered species of tiger is saved, there is a high possibility that the deer will become endangered in that forest. And then if we take measure to save deer's in that area, again, there are high chances that the plants in that area might get extinct. This food chain will continue forever and hence there will be one species which will be endangered in the end.
Furthermore, even if those animals and plants species are in danger because of human activities, we must act wisely, Our actions should not affect our world economy. We should not take decisions which can cost us jobs and hence leave our generation unemployed. Actually, this unemployment can lead to great burdensome on us, which can lead to other drastic situations like poverty. Saving endangered animal and plant species not only affects us, but our progeny also. The loss of jobs, which in turn lead to poverty, can further lead to illiteracy in our next generation due to lack of money. There is a possibility that our children might not be able to see some animal and plant species, but they could be able to complete their studies and secure their future, which in my view is more important.
Finally, I understand that some will not agree with my points because each species in this Earth should be saved for our progeny to see. But, the disadvantages of costing our jobs and economy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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As the Earth is getting old it is evolving...
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...en extinct due to this natural process. According to me, Making an extraordinary effort, especi...
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...due to natural circumstances. We live i a world of food chain and the survival of...
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... chain and the survival of the fittest. Lets take an example of a forest where all t...
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...s which can cost us jobs and hence leave our generation unemployed. Actually, thi...
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...es not only affects us, but our progeny also. The loss of jobs, which in turn lead t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, furthermore, hence, if, so, then, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 358.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65921787709 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48225184722 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480446927374 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 704.065955056 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.681330934 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6666666667 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94444444444 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236371871018 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802863242306 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787301147481 0.0758088955206 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148828938055 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374991514434 0.0667264976115 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 100.480337079 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.