to understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position
No one can gainsay that how we live can reflect on the characteristics and attributes of a society. Indisputably, some individuals are of the opinion that countryside or suburban areas are liable to preserve the traditional custom or original traits of a country. However, not everyone supports such idea. In some cases, major cities such as capitals may have a variety of cultural heritages and places, so that we can relish a nation’s beauty and history.
First and foremost, people believe that outskirts in a nation have well preserved the native custom and culture of a country than major cities. That is mainly due to the fact that those areas are less developed and industrialised, and their residents tend to engage in traditional lifestyle. In fact, in South Korea, most people in the countryside are the elderly who engage in traditional agricultural production and tend to live in a traditional Korean-style house, whereas urbanites live in an apartment and work in somewhat new industry. Similarly, people in countryside are less influced by foreign culture and tradition, while the urban areas are often mingled with other cultures, as everything is not being internationalized . Many of people in surban areas still follow the old custom and tradition, so that it is easier to experience the original custom in those places. Therefore, many claim that we can learn better about a nation’s traits by basking in the traditional lifestyle in the outskirts.
However, what was alluded above should not be overgeneralized to all contexts. This is because many major cities nowardays also contain well-conserved cultural heritages or places. First of all, as a vivid example, in Paris, there are one of the most historical places, Luvuer Museum, which possesses a number of artfacts and masterpieces of important artists in France. People can relish beautiful arts and lifestyle of the people in old days by visiting these places. Secondly, people can learn about history in the culturally important places in a major city. As many historical places in cities can reflect on what has happened to the people in a country, this is also helpful to educate young people. For instance, Westminster in London may enlighten us about the history of governance from feudal to democratic style, by observing the change of the role of the place. As seen from these examples, we can understand that major cities also have a lot of historically and culturally importance that people can learn about culture, arts, and history.
Based on above discussion, there is no denying the fact that countryside can delineate the original custom and culture of a society because it is less developed and influenced by foreign culture than the urban area. However, we should not neglect the fact that major cities like capitals also have well-conserved cultural places like museum, so that people can enjoy the beuty of the nation. Therefore, we should appreciate the importance of the major city for promoting the awareness of the culture and should make efforts to make our culture known to a variety of people in the world by means of advocating the cultural heritage in a major city.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 732, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...verything is not being internationalized . Many of people in surban areas still fo...
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Line 2, column 892, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'many claims'.
Suggestion: many claims
...inal custom in those places. Therefore, many claim that we can learn better about a nation...
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Line 2, column 921, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...Therefore, many claim that we can learn better about a nation's traits by basking...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, still, therefore, well, whereas, while, for instance, in fact, such as, first of all, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2667.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 522.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1091954023 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93359936142 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438697318008 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 877.5 704.065955056 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.913526341 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.0 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.21951772744 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.066982391666 0.243740707755 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0231348384105 0.0831039109588 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0281278822022 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0440562455461 0.150359130593 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0162508930017 0.0667264976115 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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