Students when study the same national curriculum until they reach college have to study part of curriculum that are not related to their field of interest and are not able to experience their chosen field in depth.
As of now, when students study same national curriculum, the rigid syllabus make it hard for students to focus on their field of interest as they have to focus on part of curriculum which are not related to their field. If the students were allowed to choose their own curriculum, it will allow them to focus on the field they prefer to expertise on. It's not a surprise for us that the loan which students or their parents have to pay till college is huge and it takes toil on them and would hinder their chances of going to college but if the student are able to choose own curriculum, the tuition fees will be less for the student. Not only the tuition fees will be less but also the free time students will gain will allow them to focus on extra activities they can take up to improve their proficiency in a particular field.
By redundant curriculum they will not be able to participate in activities which would help them being skilled on the practical part of their field. If students choose their curriculum, they will be able to create projects, attend extra sessions or would take up online specific course to help them understand their field in depth. By having standardized curriculum we will be depriving society of educated people as the time required to gain expertise on their field will increase. With specific curriculum they will be able to gain experience swiftly and would be able to contribute to the society. Although there are perks for allowing students to chose their field of interest but if a student is not aware of the field of their interest, having standarized national curriculum would help them find their interest as the scope of the curriculum will be broader, they will be exposed to myriad of fields and will be able to help them in choosing the field they have more interest in as compare to others. Students will have time till their end of the high school to decide their aptitude for fields.
Nonetheless, by considering the perks of being allowed to choose their own curriculum will help them in great deal to be adept in a specific field, pay less tuition fees and have time to gain practical experience for the future job they will be applying for and soon students will be able to get employed and help in betterment of the society. Hence the students should be allowed to choose the curriculum related to their field of interest.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...are not able to experience their chosen field in depth. As of now, when students s...
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Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
... the field they prefer to expertise on. Its not a surprise for us that the loan whi...
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Line 3, column 572, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to own'
Suggestion: to own
...e but if the student are able to choose own curriculum, the tuition fees will be le...
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Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to be' or 'be'.
Suggestion: to be; be
...ate in activities which would help them being skilled on the practical part of their ...
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Line 7, column 345, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... and help in betterment of the society. Hence the students should be allowed to choos...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, nonetheless, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 459.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62863751936 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44935022041 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.342047930283 0.4932671777 69% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.7017289946 60.3974514979 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.769230769 118.986275619 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.3076923077 23.4991977007 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.84615384615 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150015563739 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903213616373 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.031715769125 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114727637256 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0322931778784 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.2 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.7820224719 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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