Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The topic raises a controversial issue of whether a university should only focus on the course which student had adoped or it should encourage student to take variety of courses outside the field of study as well. Indisputably, the primary purpose of an student should be learning the main subjects which they have adoped. Nevertheless, some extra subjects like photography, sports, aerobics, etc. should be given by the college to the student so that they can excel in various fields irrespective of their own. Thus, a good university should focus on the overall development of an student irrespective of their field of study.
First of all, many students have other areas of interests but due to the traditional way of adopting the subjects, they were forced to learn those subjects. For instance, most of the parents are encouraging their child to study either maths or science so that they could become a doctor or an engineer later in their future. However, they neglect their child's areas of interests that about their field of study. They just imposed to study the course which they have chosen for them. Hence, its the primary responsibility of a college to provide variety of courses in which a student can succeed.
Furthermore, every child has a dream of becoming something which they recognize earlier or later. Many childs who are brilliant in their studies but are interested in other fields than study. For instance, many people would like to become a football player or a wildlife photographer irrespective of getting good score in studies. If a college provides those fields in which students are interested and later they offered a job in that field, then it will make the education system better and many people will live their life avidly after getting such achievement. The great football star of Portugal, Cristiano Ronaldo, has struggled a lot in his life for pursuing his interest. Teachers used to tell him that football will get you nothing to eat but later after becoming football player, he has not even earned a lot of money, but also registered his name amongst the great footballers in the history. Thus, if a college should help students to pursue their own interest by providing various other courses apart from their regular curriculum, then many students can achieve huge success in their lives.
Finally, many great people have achieved success in other fields after a huge amount of struggle from their parent and society. For example, Sachin Tendulkar, a great Indian cricketer called the god of Cricket, has been abandoned by their family since he wants to make his carrier in cricket instead of pursuing it in the field of medical which his family wants. Later, after getting a huge success in the field of cricket, his family accepted him and feel sorry for their previous behaviour and accepted him as well. Many students do not have that courage to fight with their family only for their carrier and hence they would like to pursue eduction in the fields according to their parents not them. Thus, if a college or university provides other courses, then students can adopt the courses of their interest and make themselves successful without too much struggle.
In conclusion, although students should be required to study the subjects which they have adopted, some extra subjects other than their syllabus should be taught by the colleges so that many student could be shaped according to their interest and later make their carrier in that field. This will not only makes people happy but can make world a better place to live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 252, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...l. Indisputably, the primary purpose of an student should be learning the main sub...
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Line 1, column 580, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...uld focus on the overall development of an student irrespective of their field of ...
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Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...which they have chosen for them. Hence, its the primary responsibility of a college...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun childs seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many '.
Suggestion: Many
... which they recognize earlier or later. Many childs who are brilliant in their studies but ...
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Line 9, column 187, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun student seems to be countable; consider using: 'many students'.
Suggestion: many students
...hould be taught by the colleges so that many student could be shaped according to their inte...
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Line 9, column 307, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'will' requires base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...rrier in that field. This will not only makes people happy but can make world a bette...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, thus, well, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 33.0505617978 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2984.0 2235.4752809 133% => OK
No of words: 601.0 442.535393258 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96505823627 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95129289623 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50082253683 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42928452579 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 909.9 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.0714209449 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.333333333 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0416666667 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.20833333333 5.21951772744 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224953975567 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804290485145 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699922142536 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152387506114 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0662735945643 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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