The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The owner argues that by focusing only on domestic cheese and discontinuing the imported cheese, the company can make a lot of profit. Stated in this way, the argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which the argument needs to be evaluated. To justify the argument, the owner should need to provide more information about the usage of imported cheese throuhgout the United States. Furthermore, a detailed study of usage of domestic and imported cheeses need to be provided in order to assess their sales rate in previous years.
First of all, the owner is claiming that last y...
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: To justify the argument, the owner should need to provide more information about the usage of imported cheese throuhgout the United States.
Error: throuhgout Suggestion: throughout
Sentence: Thus, the comparision of sales rate of newest stores with the whole chain makes the argument inadequate.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: Directly discontinuing the sales of imported cheese throughout the whole chain can make negetive impact on the sales.
Error: negetive Suggestion: negative
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 524 350
No. of Characters: 2571 1500
No. of Different Words: 199 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.784 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.906 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.492 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 174 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.96 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.023 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...s rate which apply to the newest stores doesnt convincingly apply to whole chain. Poss...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...to whole chain. Possibly, they may have a large number of stores which are old and popular and al...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the newest'.
Suggestion: of the newest
...es. Thus, the comparision of sales rate of newest stores with the whole chain makes the a...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 463, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...le chain makes the argument inadequate. If the owner had provided a detailed infor...
^^
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...oducts or not. Who are these people, we dont really know. Presumably, people who hav...
^^^^
Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had given'?
Suggestion: had given
...oods which abstain cheese. If the owner would have given some idea about the subscribers, whethe...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 576, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...uld like to use cheese products or not. Also if they like cheese products, then whet...
^^^^
Line 7, column 674, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...imported cheese etc. If these questions would have been answered the argument should definitely...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 730, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'seem'
Suggestion: seem
...answered the argument should definitely seems convincing. In conclusion, the owner...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'owners'' or 'owner's'?
Suggestion: owners'; owner's
...seems convincing. In conclusion, the owners argument seems to be unpersuasive as it...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, by the way, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2630.0 2260.96107784 116% => OK
No of words: 522.0 441.139720559 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03831417625 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55587721355 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.383141762452 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 815.4 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2246383648 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.153846154 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245136846102 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0803004793847 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607755010814 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153159382765 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0737920268736 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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