The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the memo of the owner of the chain of cheese stores located throughout the united states, it is said that they have been stocking cheese of different variety both international and domestic since long time but last year all the best selling cheese of there newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from wisconsin. Also, a recent survey by cheeses of the world magazine has supported the owners claim by saying there survey also predict that the people are in favour of domestic cheese rather than imported cheese. Here, there are many assumption given which does not have any supporting evidences.
firstly, the owner had said about the best selling cheese at the newest store. These itself generates question, how best selling? the owner had not given any proof regarding it. Even the owner takes about the best selling cheese at their newest store then what about the other store. Here the owner fails in giving any evidences regarding the same. How can one just make a generalised point by just seeing the sells of the only one store that also newest. So, it can be considered that the assumed increased sales of the domestic cheese is just a biases thought without any proper data.
Secondly, in the argument a survey by Cheeses of the world magazine is given which itself is without any valid ground. Neither the number of people participated in the survey is shown nor how many of them supported is shown. How can one validate such survey? They have told that the participating people were their subscribers but had not told about how many subscribers they have? Also they had not told how many of the subscriber that they have participated in the survey. Also, how many of them is in the favour of the domestic cheese. It may be possible that the subscriber of the magazine like domestic but the people who does not subscribe to this magazine may like the imported cheese. So, here again the owner is giving the survey which does not validate any point mentioned above. i.e they are just merely a assumptions without a evidences. So, it can be inferred that there is no proper discription of the survey that prove it to be true.
Finally, the owner says that it will be helpful in increasing profit. But there arises a question how? Also he/she says that they will discontinue stocking imported cheese and concentrating primarily on the domestic cheese which will increase profit but it can be doubted that these can turn there tactics to increase profit the other way and may lead to losses as the other people will go away from their customer base.
At the end, it can be concluded that there are no enough evidences to support the owners point. So, the above point should be considered before going any step ahead.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: So, it can be inferred that there is no proper discription of the survey that prove it to be true.
Error: discription Suggestion: description
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- not exactly
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 479 350
No. of Characters: 2209 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.678 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.612 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.321 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.826 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.25 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.826 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.522 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.137 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'there the newest'.
Suggestion: there the newest
...ast year all the best selling cheese of there newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses fro...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 552, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'givens', 'gives'?
Suggestion: givens; gives
...cheese. Here, there are many assumption given which does not have any supporting evid...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s not have any supporting evidences. firstly, the owner had said about the be...
^^^^
Line 3, column 5, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Firstly
...t have any supporting evidences. firstly, the owner had said about the best sell...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...f generates question, how best selling? the owner had not given any proof regarding...
^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ses thought without any proper data. Secondly, in the argument a survey by Ch...
^^^^
Line 5, column 387, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...d about how many subscribers they have? Also they had not told how many of the subsc...
^^^^
Line 5, column 820, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ntioned above. i.e they are just merely a assumptions without a evidences. So, it...
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Line 5, column 820, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a assumption' or simply 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: a assumption; assumptions
...ntioned above. i.e they are just merely a assumptions without a evidences. So, it can be infe...
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Line 5, column 842, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y are just merely a assumptions without a evidences. So, it can be inferred that ...
^
Line 5, column 842, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a evidence' or simply 'evidences'?
Suggestion: a evidence; evidences
...y are just merely a assumptions without a evidences. So, it can be inferred that there is n...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the survey that prove it to be true. Finally, the owner says that it will be ...
^^^
Line 7, column 107, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...rofit. But there arises a question how? Also he/she says that they will discontinue ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ll go away from their customer base. At the end, it can be concluded that the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2267.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 477.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75262054507 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34508465768 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.410901467505 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 71.8256110312 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.68 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.08 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.28 5.70786347227 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217895100913 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553081426916 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0936713863775 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13097853125 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138664688914 0.0628817314937 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.09 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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