The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the memo, the owner suggests that discontinuing stocking many of imported cheese is the best way to improve profits owing to the data of magazine, number of best-selling number and so on.
He points out that all of the five best-selling cheeses at the newest store are domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. It’s likely that the selling number of the top 5 indeed transcend other kinds of cheeses by a large amount. However, what’s the price of each brand of cheese? As we known, the profit is equal to revenue minus cost. Even though consumers prefer buying domestic cheeses to imported, it’s still possible that the profit of imported cheese is higher than domestic ones for the high unit price.
In addition, which kind of the best-selling cheeses are in different stores located in other cities? The owner recommends that all of the stores should stop stocking imported cheese. Nevertheless, it’s likely that residents of different areas don’t have the same preference to cheese. Even though it has a low probability that all of the citizens in U.S have unanimous choice, but the owner should provide readers with the best-selling list before making this significant decision.
He also mentions that the recent survey indicates that an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Which country publishes the magazine? It’s possible that this publisher is a local one in other countries except for U.S. Even though it’s published by U.S, we still don’t know whether the subscribers are uniformly distributed in every cities. It’s likely that most of the subscribers live in a certain city, so the data is suitable for the city but not for other cities.
On the other hand, it’s probable that the subscribing qualification is strict, such as wealth. Even though they really like some of the brands of cheeses which are expensive, it’s not necessary to prove that their consumption may raise the profit. At the same time, stores may lose some of the consumers routinely buying imported cheeses.
To sum up, before the owner deciding to discontinue stocking many of imported cheeses, he needs more comprehensive consideration.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 358 350
No. of Characters: 1757 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.35 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.908 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.672 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.439 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.327 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...number and so on. He points out that all of the five best-selling cheeses at the newest...
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Line 3, column 297, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[1]
Message: Possible grammatical error. You used a past participle without using any required verb ('be' or 'have'). Did you mean 'knew'?
Suggestion: knew
...he price of each brand of cheese? As we known, the profit is equal to revenue minus c...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...other cities? The owner recommends that all of the stores should stop stocking imported ch...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 296, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s;t have the same preference to cheese. Even though it has a low probability that all of th...
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Line 5, column 338, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...en though it has a low probability that all of the citizens in U.S have unanimous choice, ...
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Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
...obability that all of the citizens in U.S have unanimous choice, but the owner sh...
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Line 7, column 289, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
...S. Even though it's published by U.S, we still don't know whether the s...
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Line 8, column 130, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...as wealth. Even though they really like some of the brands of cheeses which are expensive, ...
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Line 8, column 293, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ofit. At the same time, stores may lose some of the consumers routinely buying imported che...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, except for, in addition, kind of, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28248587571 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80229975368 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528248587571 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7038140971 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.888888889 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.70786347227 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.266102344404 0.218282227539 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865635770152 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586736747652 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136108175181 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494202404277 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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