The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a national newspaper.
"Your recent article on corporate downsizing* in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship, often for years, before finding other suitable employment. But this claim is undermined by a recent report on the Elthyrian economy, which found that since 1999 far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated, bringing the unemployment rate in Elthyria to its lowest level in decades. Moreover, two-thirds of these newly created jobs have been in industries that tend to pay above-average wages, and the vast majority of these jobs are full-time. Downsizing is the process whereby corporations deliberately make themselves smaller, reducing the number of their employees."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the letter to the editor of the national newspaper, author had questioned on the article of the newspaper that states that due to the corporate downsizing in elthyria majority of the workers who had lost there jobs are facing economic hardships for years till they find new job. Author states that the article is not correct by giving some figures which seems to be a assumption. As there are no evidence given to support the assumption that author had taken.
Firstly, the author states that the claim of the newspaper article are undermined by the report on Elthyria. Here the author had not stated whose report. Report can be from any one but that can not be considered true. He/She has not given any authorative source that can give report that can be considered true. Not all the report given by anybody can be considered legible. The author had completely failed in giving any sources of this economy report. So, it can not be considered a evidence.
Secondly, he/she says that more jobs are created than eliminated since 1999 which brought the unemployment rate to its lowest in decades in Elthyria. Here, again the author had not given any evidences relating to these points. Neither any numbers related to the employment rate is given nor any number of created or eliminated is given. It make us to believe that without any figures author is just assuming any thing to provide contradictory view of the article.
Moreover, author is stating that two-third of the newly created jobs have been in the industries which pay above average wages and most of the jobs are full time which is against the claim made in the newspaper article. There are no number provided by the author about how many newly created jobs. And what is the average salary that he/she is saying that these industries provide above average-wages in this jobs. And also, he/she states that vast majority of the jobs are full time. Again question arises how many? Thus, it can be conclude that author had provided facts without any evidence and so are not liable to be considered.
At the end, It can be inferred that the author is just trying to provide contradictory views against the newspaper article which are without proof and should not lead to considered legible. They should be rechecked with the facts which provide proof.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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In GRE, we have to accept all data or evidence are true. It is important to find out loopholes behind surveys or studies. Loopholes mean that we accept all surveys told are true, but there are some conditions applied, for example:
It works for time A (10 years ago), but it doesn't mean it works for time B (nowadays).
It works for location A (a city, community, nation), but it doesn't mean it works for location B (another city, community, nation).
It works for people A (a manager), but it doesn't mean it works for people B (a worker).
It works for event A (one event, project... ), but it doesn't mean it works for event B (another event, project...).
It works for A and B, but not C.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 1873 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.648 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.392 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.318 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.182 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.318 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.176 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In the letter to the editor of the natio...
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Line 2, column 383, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...y giving some figures which seems to be a assumption. As there are no evidence gi...
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Line 2, column 397, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...figures which seems to be a assumption. As there are no evidence given to support ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he assumption that author had taken. Firstly, the author states t...
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Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...stated whose report. Report can be from any one but that can not be considered true. He...
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Line 5, column 496, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...my report. So, it can not be considered a evidence. Secondly,...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...it can not be considered a evidence. Secondly, he/she says that m...
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Line 8, column 353, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...r of created or eliminated is given. It make us to believe that without any figures ...
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Line 8, column 421, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...out any figures author is just assuming any thing to provide contradictory view of the ar...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e contradictory view of the article. Moreover, author is stating ...
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Line 11, column 165, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
... average wages and most of the jobs are full time which is against the claim made in the ...
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Line 11, column 417, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...dustries provide above average-wages in this jobs. And also, he/she states that vast...
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Line 11, column 487, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...ates that vast majority of the jobs are full time. Again question arises how many? Thus, ...
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Line 14, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...o are not liable to be considered. At the end, It can be inferred that the ...
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Line 14, column 264, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ked with the facts which provide proof.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, moreover, second, secondly, so, third, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85213032581 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4382242579 2.78398813304 88% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441102756892 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 621.9 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 59.237039591 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1363636364 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105139923373 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318069201875 0.0743258471296 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0866330990911 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0763104837337 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107267636975 0.0628817314937 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.