The president of Grove College has recommended that the college abandon its century-old tradition of all-female education and begin admitting men. Pointing to other all-female colleges that experienced an increase in applications after adopting coeducation, the president argues that coeducation would lead to a significant increase in applications and enrollment. However, the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan. Arguing that all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college, the director cites annual surveys of incoming students in which these students say that the school's all-female status was the primary reason they selected Grove. The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the given argument, it is stated that the president of the grove college wants the college to abandon the tradition of all-female education and start coeducation like the other colleges. As the other colleges had experienced the increase in the application after they started coeducation. but the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan. There are lots of assumption taken by the president as well as the director of the alumni association in proving their points which lacks the evidences.
Firstly, the president suggest that they should abandon the all-female education and start coeducation by admitting male students too. He/She argues that after adopting coeducation there would be significant increase in the application and enrollments of the students in groove college. As there has been the increase in application in the other colleges which had left all-female education and started coeducation. These does not makes a sense that as there is the increase in the enrollments in other college that would be repeated in Grove college too. Also, on what basis he/she is saying that there is increase in enrollment in other college which change their system. There are no evidence which can prove it.
Secondly, the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan saying that the all-female education is the identity of the Grove college. Where is the evidence of the identity? What is the proof regarding that? It can be inferred that the identity may be due to some other reason or may be due to the quality of education or due to infrastucture of the college. He/She cites the annual survey of the incoming students in which this student had stated that the primary reason for the selecting the college is that Grove provides all-female education. These is the proof that the director gives regarding his point but how can this survey be considered a legible. He/She has also not cited any number of students who took part in the survey and how many students had favoured the all-female education. There is no evidences that supports the directors point.
thirdly, the director also point to the survey of alumnae of Grove which support all-female education but again there are no numbers given regarding how many alumnae responded to the survey and how many have supported the all-female education. So, here again he/she creates ambiguity regarding the surveys without showing any evidences.
finally, it can be concluded that both the president and director are explaining there plans without any proof or evidences creating ambiguos situation. So, before taking any step everything should be made clear regarding all the above mentioned points.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: finally, it can be concluded that both the president and director are explaining there plans without any proof or evidences creating ambiguos situation.
Error: ambiguos Suggestion: ambiguous
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 441 350
No. of Characters: 2204 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.583 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.998 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.655 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.48 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.34 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In the given argument, it is stated that...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 301, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ication after they started coeducation. but the director of the alumnae association...
^^^
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun assumption seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of assumptions'.
Suggestion: lots of assumptions
...association opposes the plan. There are lots of assumption taken by the president as well as the d...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'make'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: make
...and started coeducation. These does not makes a sense that as there is the increase i...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'make'
Suggestion: make
...and started coeducation. These does not makes a sense that as there is the increase i...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 556, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[4]
Message: Did you mean 'this'?
Suggestion: This
...at Grove provides all-female education. These is the proof that the director gives re...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 657, Rule ID: DT_JJ_NO_NOUN[1]
Message: Probably a noun is missing in this part of the sentence.
...t but how can this survey be considered a legible. He/She has also not cited any number o...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 806, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'There are no evidences'?
Suggestion: There are no evidences
... had favoured the all-female education. There is no evidences that supports the directors point. ...
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Line 7, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thirdly
... that supports the directors point. thirdly, the director also point to the survey ...
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Line 9, column 2, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Finally
...veys without showing any evidences. finally, it can be concluded that both the pres...
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Line 9, column 155, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[4]
Message: “So , before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... evidences creating ambiguos situation. So, before taking any step everything should be ma...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 16.3942115768 165% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18577981651 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69514346397 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.392201834862 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 724.5 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.9516025572 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.772727273 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8181818182 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358661716503 0.218282227539 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112766791366 0.0743258471296 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116234642118 0.0701772020484 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216742249389 0.128457276422 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135685842042 0.0628817314937 216% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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