Claim: Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Reason: It is inappropriate—and, perhaps, even cruel—to use public resources to fund the arts when people's basic needs are not being met.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The topic raises a controversial issue about whether the government should fund for arts or not if the nation's economy is low. Indisputably, in today's era of technology, art and creativity has been declined and should be praised by people as well as government. Nevertheless, if the public resources are limited in a country, then the government funds should be given for public needs instead of arts. Thus, the government should help people instead of the arts where the citizens are indigent.
First of all, the government is formed from people of a country. Their first aim should help the poor people and enhance the growth and economy of a country. In order to achieve this, the government should stop funding on unnecessary resources and enhance the fund for education and food. Since good education is a necessity for the growth of an individual as well as the country. Hence, the government should enhance funds for schools and colleges so that everyone will get a substantial amount of knowledge so that they get the job and enhance the nation's economy. For instance, the Indian government in the state of Bihar, which is an Indian state with the largest population in India, has reduced the student's fee enormously and provides them free meals in their lunch in order to make their state grow. It has influenced Bihar so much that there GDP(an index to measure the economy of a state in India) has increased greatly within a shorter period. Had it been possible if the government had spent the funds for some other purpose like funding arts? Therefore, in order to enhance the growth of the nation as well as individual, the government should use their funds for a necessary purpose which will give future benefits to the people.
Secondly, although in today's era of technology, the interest of people towards art has been declined enormously. Due to a high cost of living and low salary in art background, people are getting away from arts and thus government has a responsibility to preserve the art from extinction. In order to achieve this, they should fund arts in order to preserve and promote it. However, it depends on a nation whether they have the necessary funds for arts or not. For instance, In London, many exhibitions are held for arts and cultures in order to make people aware of the history of arts and many people are sanguinely attending those exhibitions and praise their art. Is the same thing possible for a country with a low economy like Bangladesh or Bhutan? Since it is glaringly obvious that poor people can't focus their interest in arts if they're not even getting food for their survival. Hence, if the government help these poor people in education and survival, then possibly in future, some people might choose arts as their hobby and wants to pursue their carrier in it.
In conclusion, a country should be known from its people, hence it's the responsibility of their government to enhance their economy by providing funds for education rather than anywhere else. If people are educated and knowledgeable then they will make the world a better place to live.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 104, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...ment should fund for arts or not if the nations economy is low. Indisputably, in todays...
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Line 3, column 551, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...o that they get the job and enhance the nations economy. For instance, the Indian gover...
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Line 5, column 802, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...t is glaringly obvious that poor people cant focus their interest in arts if theyre ...
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Line 5, column 839, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...le cant focus their interest in arts if theyre not even getting food for their surviva...
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Line 5, column 977, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...n education and survival, then possibly in future, some people might choose arts as their...
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Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... should be known from its people, hence its the responsibility of their government ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2578.0 2235.4752809 115% => OK
No of words: 531.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8549905838 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6239814139 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416195856874 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.9 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.677066984 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.086956522 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0869565217 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30434782609 5.21951772744 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355943323188 0.243740707755 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122215904572 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659309677664 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238848927335 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774711438795 0.0667264976115 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.