We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening th

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We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café.

According to the author from last 20 years Monarch book is a pioneer in retailing book in that area and now it has plan to expand it even more and attach more customers. It plans to open a cafe by removing the kids section, but altering this change may not bring significant customer increase. Rather it may dampen the current customer sales as well. The author has planned to do this change after hearing the National Census reports which states that there has been significant decline in the percentage of the population under the age 10. Based on this report it may not be wise decision to start a cafe by discontinue the kids section.

The report says there has been decline in the population of children below the age 10 but it does not indicate the actual figures, it can also be a very small decline instead of a major one. So without counting the actual figure we cannot predict the kids section would not generate enough revenue. Moreover, many times parents come with their child to buy books for them but ultimately many times they end up buying books for them as well which otherwise they would have skipped.
Today is modern era and everything is available online and with the increase of tablets like kindle reader many people prefer reading book on them or online as it is not only cheap but quite handy, this cuts the major part of the books sale. But their kids, below the age 10 are not comfortable with online reading or soft copies they have to come to books store and this keeps our customer count up and eventually many parent get attracted to some book and buy them along with their kids or many times just to teach their there that reading is a good habit they buy book and so they children can also follow them and do the same. As many children try copying what their parents keep on doing and so they also tend to become a long time customer.

Now even if we ignore the above two points and consider the hypothesis situation that we have opened a cafe but now they itself can serve a major a problem for store and customers. A cafe generally have a relaxing ambiance where most people come to talk, spend time or discuss their personally or any other issues. This will generate a lot of noise and it will cause an disturbance to our customer who are reading or focusing on which book to buy. They will be constantly hindered with the cafe’s disturbance and moreover book store are quite like library where most people come and read books for some time before buying them. This will be a potential threat to such customer as they will not be able to concentrate on book and we’ll eventually lose our sale. Not only this many people will come of buying an instead end up having a nice time in cafe and spending their money in cafe instead of buying books which could have bring more profit to us.

In the end I will like to finish off by summing up that opening a cafe is not a solution through which we can increase our sales and nor by discontinuing kids section will bring any improvement. Instead of doing any such action which can decrease our any age group customer we can try to give some weekly sale in which they can be some discount on particular section where we feel that sale is not good. This will not only attract more customers but will also boost our market value.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'planned'.
Suggestion: planned
...ailing book in that area and now it has plan to expand it even more and attach more ...
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Line 1, column 295, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...ot bring significant customer increase. Rather it may dampen the current customer sale...
^^^^^^
Line 4, column 231, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'books'' or 'book's'?
Suggestion: books'; book's
... handy, this cuts the major part of the books sale. But their kids, below the age 10 ...
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Line 6, column 368, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...nerate a lot of noise and it will cause an disturbance to our customer who are rea...
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Line 6, column 937, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'brought'.
Suggestion: brought
...nstead of buying books which could have bring more profit to us. In the end I will...
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Line 8, column 14, Rule ID: WILL_LIKE_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'would'?
Suggestion: would
...ring more profit to us. In the end I will like to finish off by summing up that o...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'so', 'well']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.209627329193 0.240241500013 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.17701863354 0.157235817809 113% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0776397515528 0.0880659088768 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0745341614907 0.0497285424764 150% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0745341614907 0.0444667217837 168% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.0869565217391 0.12292977631 71% => OK
Participles: 0.0481366459627 0.0406280797675 118% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.23126790507 2.79330140395 80% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0295031055901 0.030933414821 95% => OK
Particles: 0.00621118012422 0.0016655270985 373% => OK
Determiners: 0.0947204968944 0.0997080785238 95% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0372670807453 0.0249443105267 149% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0186335403727 0.0148568991511 125% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3325.0 2732.02544248 122% => OK
No of words: 609.0 452.878318584 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45977011494 6.0361032391 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96768813016 4.58838876751 108% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.252873563218 0.366273622748 69% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.170771756979 0.280924506359 61% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.114942528736 0.200843997647 57% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0591133004926 0.132149295362 45% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.23126790507 2.79330140395 80% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 219.290929204 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423645320197 0.48968727796 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.0062543019 55.4138127331 92% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 30.45 23.380412469 130% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8891137989 59.4972553346 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 166.25 141.124799967 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.45 23.380412469 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.35 0.674092028746 52% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.21349557522 115% => OK
Readability: 47.5271756979 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.05714285714 1.64882698954 64% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198945547096 0.391690518653 51% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.137758687298 0.123202303941 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0793495329157 0.077325440228 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.534888359456 0.547984918172 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.120732611914 0.149214159877 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0790994644911 0.161403998019 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444670869537 0.0892212321368 50% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.374477671539 0.385218514788 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0341120523831 0.0692045440612 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136547774855 0.275328986314 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386436692982 0.0653680567796 59% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.4325221239 105% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.30420353982 113% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 7.22455752212 138% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 13.5995575221 118% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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