The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Every democratic society is deeply rooted in the ideal of “authority is made by the people for the people”. The prompt above recommends that a society’s well being can be improved when a lot of its own people question the authority. In my opinion, I mostly agree with the statement and argue that most of the times it leads to an overall improvement in the well-being of the society, but not always.
To begin, questioning the authority will actually help the authority in making wise decisions beneficial for the society and it’ll also bring light to the issues that are currently affecting the society. For instance, consider a democratic country say India, the ruling party or the authority as well as the opposition which question them are voted in by the people. Before passing any law there is always a debate on the parliament floor between the ruling party and the opposition with the topic of the debate being is the law going to be beneficial for the society. There are many instances in which the opposition have come up with some valid counterpoints, consequently the ruling party have also changed the laws accordingly. Moreover, every news channel in a society acts as a medium by which the government can be questioned. This benefits the society because news channels are a widely watched medium, the more people get to know about the issues, the more they are going to support it and thus if a government doesn’t take action regarding these issues all these supporters hold rallies, protests until the issue is resolved. A great example for this would be the new law that was passed in India against rape offenders, it was because of news channels these rape cases was brought to the nation and as many people started supporting it by rallying, holding protests etc, the government was made to take an action and as a result India now has a law for these cases. Sometimes the authority are deeply focused on a particular problem that they tend to either not acknowledge or worse forget about the other problems that is affecting the society in the present. So when there are many people questioning about the authorities blind eyes to these issues, it helps the authorities to make an informed decision for the well being of all in a society.
However, it is not always true that questioning the authority will lead to overall improvement in the well being of the society, sometimes it can lead to either no improvement or worse, punishment. For instance, in India the electric lines are being built by the government themselves. Usually, these electric lines will involve erecting a number of towers. So when some of these pass through someones land, the government has the right to take the land for its own purposes, but mostly if not all the times, the people in that society complain and question the authority. The government however doesn’t bother answering these questions because ultimately they are building these electric lines for the overall well-being of the society. So, in this case the questioning of the authority didn’t lead to any improvement of the society whose land was taken. An example where questioning can lead to punishment would be that of colonial rule by the British. The British would take resources from its colonial empire and those who questioned it would get severely punished. Another instance would be that of the time when slavery was allowed. When the slaves question the authority, it usually resulted in punishment. Thus, questioning the authority doesn’t always lead to improvement in the well-being of the society.
In conclusion this recommendation to question the authority for the improving the well-being of the society is a complicated one. It mostly applies when the questioning will lead to improvement of not just one but many societies, otherwise it doesn’t hold water. In a society that is democratic the worst case scenario would be that of a no improvement in the well being whereas in a society that is based on dictatorship it could also lead to severe punishment. Thus, the recommendation mostly applies but not always.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
... the well-being of the society, but not always. To begin, questioning the authori...
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Line 13, column 517, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[3]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
...e recommendation mostly applies but not always.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, consequently, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, well, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.5258426966 215% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.3162921348 221% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3462.0 2235.4752809 155% => OK
No of words: 693.0 442.535393258 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99567099567 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.13077900149 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8584609317 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 268.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.386724386724 0.4932671777 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1092.6 704.065955056 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.2542623368 60.3974514979 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.222222222 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 5.21951772744 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226992645039 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782902538145 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0451249222258 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167052300527 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295864725765 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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