Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing your position, be sure to mention the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
People's behavior is largely determined by forces that are not of their own making.
Behavior can be defined as the response of the organism to external stimulus. Our behavior is, partly, the function of our genetics and more importantly our surroundings. How we behave in certain situation, will largely depend upon our experience with similar situaion in the past. Also the upbringing of the person along with environment in which they grew up plays an important role in shaping up the behavior of the person. Therefore, I strongly agree with the statement that, people's behavior is largely determined by the forced that are not of their own making.
Let's take an exapmple of two kids, Harshal and Scott, playing a game of cricket. During the game, in an unfortunate accident, cricket ball shatters the window of their neighbour. Both kids agree their fault in the situation and tell their parents the truth. While is Harshal is praised for his honesty by his parents, Scott's parents punish Scott for his actions. Even though both kids are subjected to same situation, different outcomes, namely praise and punishment, will shape their behavior. In other words, when met with similar experience in the future, the chances of Harshal being honest are much greater than that of Scott. This example shows, how the upbringing of a person has huge impact on the person's behavior. Clearly, you cannot choose your parents or tell them how to parent you, things of such nature are out of one's control.
Lets take an exapmple of kids, who grew up living in and arround slums. These children are subjected to very cruel and unfortunate thing at a very young age. Many of them grow up to be vulnerable
and end up being used by the society. If they are lucky enough to have parents, who love them and provide them basic education, they end up being a good citizen and making good choices. However, many of them, driven by their basic needs such food and shelter and inability of thier parents to provide for them, end making bad choices, and consequently in jail. This example also illustrates how one's behavior is not in their control but is a fucntion of many external factors, which are out of their control.
However there are exceptions to most generalized statements. This statement is also subejected to such exception. Many individuals, despite their harsh upbringing and abusive environment, end being the best version of themselves, making a name for themselves in the world. But such cases are rarely seen.
In conclusion, I would say peoples behavior cannot be sumed up in one statement. We muct realize that it's a comples fucntion of many internal as well as external factors. But at the end of the, it is the external factors, that matter the most in decidind person decision in any particular situation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ence with similar situaion in the past. Also the upbringing of the person along with...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ed that are not of their own making. Lets take an exapmple of two kids, Harshal a...
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Line 3, column 707, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ging of a person has huge impact on the persons behavior. Clearly, you cannot choose yo...
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Line 3, column 830, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...t you, things of such nature are out of ones control. Lets take an exapmple of ki...
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Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...such nature are out of ones control. Lets take an exapmple of kids, who grew up l...
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Line 6, column 396, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...jail. This example also illustrates how ones behavior is not in their control but is...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ors, which are out of their control. However there are exceptions to most generalize...
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Line 10, column 103, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... in one statement. We muct realize that its a comples fucntion of many internal as ...
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Line 10, column 190, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
... as external factors. But at the end of the, it is the external factors, that matter...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 464.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90086206897 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58942328729 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 215.323595506 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519396551724 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.2157551145 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.4615384615 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8461538462 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11538461538 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120654073577 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322418389186 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364912165793 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0582929412749 0.150359130593 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0192901194343 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.8420337079 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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