Young people should be encouraged to pursue longterm, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
With the onset of several reality shows which “provides” a platform for children to showcase their talents, an increasing number of children are auditioning and driven towards such kinds of shows. Kids as young as 3-4 years of age are made to participate and garner votes for their performances. This new found obsession with early fame and money and moreover peer pressure in schools to follow what their classmates are doing has ruined many childhoods.
It is of utmost importance that children should follow their dreams and promoting their passions and talents at a young age does have marvellous effects in their later life. There have been numerous athletes who have broken records,national and international,just because they have been training for it for so long. Practice does makes a person better. Similarly, there have been many child actors or teenagers who went on to join a reality show or a tv soap, who did taste success at first but the industry changes everyday and they somehow could not make up with its pace and were forgotten.
Pursuing something one is passionate about with realistic goals would always give better results then going after immediate recognition and fame. There have been numerous businessmen and women who are in reality highly successful and still not very popular. This is choice which each individual makes up for himself. For example: Lakshmi mittal, the business tycoon, might be the richest person in united kingdoms but you would not see him making headlines everyday. On the contrary, the newspapers these days are full of reality show winners or participants and newcomers in the movie industry etc.
One main problem with attaining immediate fame is the fear of losing it. Most people who seek overnight recognition are afraid of losing it all with time and when that does happen it can lead to that person incurring serious psychological problems such as depression. Also, anything that is immediate is temporary, just a few lucky ones are able to sustain it for long. Whereas long, realistic goals are a secure way to move into the future.The risk of losing anything is far lower in this case than the immediate one.
Schools can play a vital role in teaching young minds to continuously work hard in the field they love. Everybody faces some ups and downs in their lives and if a fellow person achieves instant fame and recognition, it is nothing to get discouraged from. Everybody has different ambitions and different ways to live their lives. Working toward building a solid future would definitely have greater returns than going after temporary achievements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , national
...umerous athletes who have broken records,national and international,just because they hav...
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Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , just
...roken records,national and international,just because they have been training for it ...
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Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ccess at first but the industry changes everyday and they somehow could not make up with...
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Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... you would not see him making headlines everyday. On the contrary, the newspapers these ...
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Line 7, column 442, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...re a secure way to move into the future.The risk of losing anything is far lower in...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'moreover', 'similarly', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'whereas', 'for example', 'such as', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242105263158 0.240241500013 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.174736842105 0.157235817809 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.117894736842 0.0880659088768 134% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0526315789474 0.0497285424764 106% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0463157894737 0.0444667217837 104% => OK
Prepositions: 0.101052631579 0.12292977631 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0547368421053 0.0406280797675 135% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.76664792059 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0210526315789 0.030933414821 68% => OK
Particles: 0.00421052631579 0.0016655270985 253% => OK
Determiners: 0.0631578947368 0.0997080785238 63% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0168421052632 0.0249443105267 68% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0231578947368 0.0148568991511 156% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2637.0 2732.02544248 97% => OK
No of words: 434.0 452.878318584 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.07603686636 6.0361032391 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.334101382488 0.366273622748 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.258064516129 0.280924506359 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.188940092166 0.200843997647 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122119815668 0.132149295362 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76664792059 2.79330140395 99% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 219.290929204 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599078341014 0.48968727796 122% => OK
Word variations: 74.9794159961 55.4138127331 135% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6194690265 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.7 23.380412469 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8977704913 59.4972553346 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.85 141.124799967 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7 23.380412469 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.65 0.674092028746 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 47.5064516129 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.45384615385 1.64882698954 88% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362921918659 0.391690518653 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0857715236864 0.123202303941 70% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0649900384395 0.077325440228 84% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.480685851878 0.547984918172 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.133469765207 0.149214159877 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114614054686 0.161403998019 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577101583782 0.0892212321368 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.234450632915 0.385218514788 61% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0442261612182 0.0692045440612 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217081263995 0.275328986314 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507060459116 0.0653680567796 78% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.4325221239 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30420353982 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.66592920354 109% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.5995575221 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.