Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
One should not pursue fame and recognition, but strive for long term goals that are realistic.
Young people who have long-term goals are more likely to succeed. Take an example of an actor who is in love with his craft and would not give up acting for anything else. He is really passionate and would accept a role in play even if he not offered a lead. Such perseverence has paid off to many actors, who later have been offered pivotal roles. Even the ones who did not have the opportunity to be a protagonist, have given their best performances in comic roles. Constrast this, with a good looking lad who is given the lead role in his first play. Smug about his immediate fame, he will not accept to play any character with fewer lines. Such a person is likely to end up being a one show phenomenon. His need for fame and recognition satisfied by always being in the lime light will end his career in acting. He may try his talent in singing, directing or writting, but if he does this for the sole purpose of being famous, he is less likely to last in any field. Thus, young people should pursue realistic goals for long term to become successful in any field.
Immediate fame and recognition are ephemeral. Fame and recognition should come as a by-product of long term efforts, they should not be the aim to strive for. If one seeks fame by involving himself in activities that please society but not him, then he will not be able to sustain his enthusiasm for a longer period.
There are a very few people who are famous, even if not for the right reasons. There are very few chances of one becoming famous. Where as, if you have realistic goals, you will most likely succeed in attaining them. Fame is not merely a result of one’s efforts, there are many factors outside the influence of a person that govern his recognition. Many people should notice you, like you, and be interested in you.
Thus one should not run for fame, but instead invest his efforts in a field that interests him. Fame and recognition are not entirely a result of ones efforts, other people and many people are vital in making a person famous.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
..., like you, and be interested in you. Thus one should not run for fame, but instea...
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Suggestion: one's
...ecognition are not entirely a result of ones efforts, other people and many people a...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'thus']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.200923787529 0.240241500013 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.15935334873 0.157235817809 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101616628176 0.0880659088768 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0646651270208 0.0497285424764 130% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0623556581986 0.0444667217837 140% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.10623556582 0.12292977631 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0415704387991 0.0406280797675 102% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.38925171421 2.79330140395 86% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0207852193995 0.030933414821 67% => OK
Particles: 0.00692840646651 0.0016655270985 416% => OK
Determiners: 0.066974595843 0.0997080785238 67% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0300230946882 0.0249443105267 120% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0230946882217 0.0148568991511 155% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2136.0 2732.02544248 78% => OK
No of words: 388.0 452.878318584 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50515463918 6.0361032391 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.58838876751 97% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.286082474227 0.366273622748 78% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.167525773196 0.280924506359 60% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.110824742268 0.200843997647 55% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0876288659794 0.132149295362 66% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38925171421 2.79330140395 86% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 219.290929204 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481958762887 0.48968727796 98% => OK
Word variations: 51.6061668353 55.4138127331 93% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6363636364 23.380412469 75% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6627044124 59.4972553346 50% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0909090909 141.124799967 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 23.380412469 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.409090909091 0.674092028746 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 34.388940956 51.4728631049 67% => OK
Elegance: 1.21774193548 1.64882698954 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332932496641 0.391690518653 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.123001853446 0.123202303941 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.105250085064 0.077325440228 136% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.473932832789 0.547984918172 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.170678676604 0.149214159877 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127844580478 0.161403998019 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0810699646634 0.0892212321368 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.282560561094 0.385218514788 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0654686079638 0.0692045440612 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224399315536 0.275328986314 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426152472654 0.0653680567796 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.4325221239 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.30420353982 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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