Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much money on clothing to improve their appearance.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Be sure to use your own words. Do not use memorized examples.
It is critically important to give the opinion about the at present people's attitude toward the clothing. Some people feels that people do not spend a lot of money to buy new cloth for developing appearnce. howeve, if I have to choose I would raise my voice for that now a days people spend too much money to buy cloth for increasing their asthetic value. It is my firm believe that people do this for increasing their satisfaction and for finding their personal freedom in case of taking decision. I will develop these ideas in the subsiquent paragraphs.
Firstly, one of the reasons for my specifric thought is that for showing the personal fredom and present them as a prestigious person people spend very much in their clothing. Because by doing so they find freeness in their mind and they can take any important decision in their life. I have to admit my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my personal experience. I remember when I was in junior high school, I always wanted to take decision by my own volition.So, I wanted to buy some new dress as like as my foreign freind. My father think I would not like it verymuch but he said if I wanted to do it I tried. After one week of continuous searching I bought some comical dress which seemed really rediculous to other people. At last I returned all of these. If I had not done this at that time , I always would have blamed my father for not buying thes dree. So fersonal freedom is very essential to any person.
Secondly, why I illustrate my specific concept is that by wearing people feel prestigious mood . And he can do any job with fresh mind. He can perform any meeting with the any important person My personal example is a compelling illustration of this. It reminds me of the time when I completed my graduation and preparing for the job interview in the publicschool. I was lazy and in America, publicschool provide different holiday and vacation. So I was excited for the job. But when I entered in the interview room , I experienced a very complrcated situation. The all member of the interview board were wellk dressed and neat and trim. Though I had secured first position in the written exam, I could have not find that job due to my appreance and dressing condition. So we can say that people dreeed to be looked gorgious and feeling prestigious.
In conclusion, in light of above stated causes, I strongly believe that today people spend so much money to increase their appearnce with dresses. This is because it give the people prestigious mood and give thaem personal freedom to take any important decision.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2151.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64578833693 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67668145071 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48596112311 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 667.8 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7308476436 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7307692308 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8076923077 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.07692307692 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133933575641 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385663861085 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475865039768 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.097560226502 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378999378325 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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