Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

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Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

In the era of YouTube and Instagram, young people today are increasingly confronted by the newest Internet sensation that has seemingly risen to stardom out of nowhere. Many of these Internet stars appear to have a desirable life: a legion of fans, a life of leisure, easy money, all posted for young people to consume (and envy) on their daily feeds. Now that instant fame and recognition is easier to obtain than ever before, many young people may be tempted to go down this path; however, as a society, we should be encouraging the younger generation to focus on dedicating their efforts to longer-term goals suited towards their unique abilities and that have a positive societal impact. Instant fame serving as the primary motivator for one’s life choices ultimately may come at the cost of a secure livelihood, recognition of the detriments of fame, and a meaningful contribution to society.

The inundation of content from social media and the Internet featuring society’s famous and recognized paints a misleading picture of the instable nature of fame and the difficulties in obtaining it. While many teenagers today look at models discovered on Instagram or singers discovered on Youtube and hope to emulate their careers, they fail to recognize the success stories we see are actually a small minority of those who actually attempt these pathways to success. In other words, the selection effect of these successes obscures the hoards of failed artists whose attempts at fame may have come at the cost of obtaining legitimate skills. For every Justin Bieber that was discovered, there are thousands of others who may have dedicated years of their life in hopes of becoming famous; at some point, these artists must face reality and often have limited prospects in employment because they lack the skills that come with more traditional training. A recent news story featured a former child actor now working at a grocery story; this is just one example of how tenuous fame is, even if one reaches that level.

Moreover, fame is a double-edged sword. While the glossy aspects of it are sure to appeal, the detriments of being a recognized face pervade one’s personal life and often impact one’s mental stability. There are countless stories of the perils of fame and its impact, particularly on younger stars: Britney Spears and Lindsay Lohan are just two examples of child stars whose personal lives and struggles have been splashed across the pages of tabloids; undoubtedly, their fame and the premature access that came with it contributed to their struggles, and the public’s interest and subsequent media coverage of these struggles undoubtedly compounded these difficulties. The trope of the drug-addicted child star comes from a place of truth, and serves as a warning sign for young people interested in pursuing fame.

Encouraging young folks to pursue a long-term goal that is in line with their unique contributions is thus not only a more reliable and stable motivator, but it also ultimately encourages broader societal contributions. In facilitating young people’s interests and encouraging them to pursue them in a more realistic way, we as a society can ensure that they obtain concrete skills and a trustworthy means of survival. Many of society’s most influential (and incidentally, well-known) names and innovators, including our presidents, leading CEOs like Warren Buffet and Steve Jobs, Supreme Court Justices, and the like, invested years of their lives pursuing long-term goals and objectives in order to achieve their successes. These goals allowed them to significantly advance society.

Through education and dedication, we as a society can inspire young people to make meaningful contributions to the world through their own unique abilities and perspectives. On the way, they may obtain fame, but ultimately it should be a by-product of their successes, not the primary motivator for it. Indeed, most of the people who handle fame the best in today’s society are those who have pursued longer-term goals and achieved success through years of hard work, which ultimately prepares them best for the spotlight.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, incidentally, look, may, moreover, so, thus, well, while, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 58.6224719101 155% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3525.0 2235.4752809 158% => OK
No of words: 670.0 442.535393258 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26119402985 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.08766726615 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89808664729 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 342.0 215.323595506 159% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510447761194 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 1110.6 704.065955056 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.2924314938 60.3974514979 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.25 118.986275619 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5 23.4991977007 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235261150106 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762947096598 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630992924452 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145355089122 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739714689725 0.0667264976115 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 14.1392134831 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.8420337079 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.82 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 201.0 100.480337079 200% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.7820224719 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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