Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek
immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting
your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true
and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker asserts that young people should pursue long-term realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition. Admittedly, immediate fame and recognition can bring out incentive and motivation for young people, long-term and realistic goals can cultivate people’s interest and elevate their skills.
Immediate fame and recognition are important for students, entrepreneurs as well as celebrities. When students get higher GPA, they will be more confident for themselves and have more motivations to work harder in the future; when entrepreneurs gain immediate success and the first bucket of gold, they are more likely to carry on to pursue future success; when celebrities become popular suddenly, they will have incentive to go after more awards and better reputation thus, immediate success can encourage young people to hold on.
However, immediate fame and reputation may make people overestimate their ability. Take Oasis as an example. The rock band from Manchester went virus in the 1990s and became one of the most famous bands in the U.K. But embedded with praise and approval, the key members of the band- Liam Gallagher and Noel Gallagher were so arrogant that had serious conflict with the other band named Blur and even said “John Lennon is the most brilliant musician in the world and we are just John Lennon.” But in the 2000s, they have created very few brilliant songs and become vulgar in recent years.
On the contrary, long-term and realistic goals can cultivate people’s interest and improve their ability. For example, in the movie Girl, the heroine Lara, a lesbian, dreams to be a ballet dancer. And in order to achieve the dream, she practices hard every day and endeavors to dance as other girls in the school.
In the nutshell, although immediate fame can motive young people, it may make them arrogant, and long-term goals can cultivate people’s ability and interests in a deeper way.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, may, so, thus, well, for example, as well as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 58.6224719101 51% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 313.0 442.535393258 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2875399361 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73390596986 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568690095847 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 141.607068974 60.3974514979 234% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 150.454545455 118.986275619 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4545454545 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45454545455 5.21951772744 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194631717258 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0903967040446 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949677385382 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121636464424 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884117782057 0.0667264976115 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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