Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It cannot be denied that young people should be required to keep a long-term and pragmatic goals instead of building the overnight reputation. The dreams which span a long period of time inspire us to progress day after day. examples that aptly amplifying this point involve in the fields of education, business and entertainment.
Although the students incline to earn a better GPA in the examination, they should consider promoting their skills and the methodology for the long-term benefits. there is a curious phenomenon that many students in china often gain a high mark in the final english tests but extremely weak in communicating in english. The LAIX, an oral english practice app, has helped many people to speak in english fluently which asks the user to keep speaking english thirty minutes a day, five times a week, for nearly a year. Besides, knowing how to figure out sample questions may contribute to a high mark in the examination, but young students are in great need to conclude all the methodology towards the same type of the problems. The students always win a great mark in the exam simply because the teachers use certain questions for the test. What if there a little change towards the question, could all students still figure out?
Since the entrepreneurs always hope to make a fortune in a short period, however, earning a permanent fame may be a better choice for them. being philanthropic, the start-ups should make some donations to the charity in order to enhance the company image and keep the sales volume of the products. For example, bill gates, the wealthiest people in the world, has established the bill & Melinda gates Foundation which claims to fund people faced with the difficulties in education and medical treatment payment. To some extent, this kind of behavior has made the Microsoft even more famous all over the world. What’s more, Yun Ma, the founder of Alibaba, has founded a program named Ant Forests aiming at controlling the desertification and change the desert to the oasis to a certain degree. The action indeed arouses a huge public attention and brand recognition.
Even though online celebrities are prone to seek the goal of being the most popular one overnight, they are faced with problems on how to keep such fame in the long run. For this, the online celebrities are in need to improve their technical skills. Timo Feng, one of Chinese most famous online celebrities, played the League of Legend for the first time with the live broadcasts. she doesn’t play very well, but she has a wonderful voice. To maintain the popularity in her own broadcasting room, she insists on practicing singing and her songs are now quite prevalent in china. Also, there are many celebrities enjoying their overnight fame and not willing to develop their own skills. A girl in the Thailand suddenly came to public attention simply because of her beautiful voice. A few weeks later, she recorded her singing and played the record to the tourists. The declination of the tourists seemed to happen day after day and the girl was out of our mind quickly.
To sum up, a variety of fields presented above often prefer a long-term plan rather than a short one. My idea is quite clear: young people should be galvanized to seek the long-term realistic goals rather than pursue immediate fame and recognition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, still, well, for example, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2810.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 567.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95590828924 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67317997752 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 304.0 215.323595506 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536155202822 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 853.2 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.581144256 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.076923077 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8076923077 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57692307692 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228316261571 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543228803971 0.0831039109588 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820109579682 0.0758088955206 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145905626034 0.150359130593 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0961455090556 0.0667264976115 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.