Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

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Young people should be encouraged to pursue long-term, realistic goals rather than seek immediate fame and recognition.

We human beings, since childhood are wired to seek validation from others. The best way for us to do that is to gain fame and recognition. Most youngsters and even grown-ups have a tendency to go behind popularity instead of meaningful goals. A sense of realization must be introduced in the youngsters to help them pursue goals that matter at the end than not the trivial ones like popularity and validation.

In schools and colleges, the most notorious kids gain popularity easily and enjoy the attention of everyone. The sedulous ones who work hard for their dreams are not regarded at all or worse discredited by others for being sincere. The nascent minds of the kids are shaped in this particular way. The thoughts of notoriousness being awarded by excessive attention are imbibed in them so that they fail to see the ephemeral nature of fame. To create awareness among children, the teachers and professors must encourage the sedulous ones in front of other kids.

Mostly, at a young age, inchoate minds are not fixated at one goal. Youngsters tend to vacillate about their ambitions, career choice, etc. In this scenario, it becomes difficult to be fixated and inured at one particular goal. Overcoming this is very difficult as every child will have a different interest and that interest itself might be transient. There should be workshop sessions held for youngsters to inculcate in their interests, even though it might not be long term, but will add to their skillsets.

Lastly, there are a million examples of young achievers who went beyond their ages to achieve their dream. One such example is of Tanmay Bakshi, the computer science child prodigy who started coding at the age of 5. He started working for Google at the age of 13 and is lionized in the technology world. Youngsters must be made aware of such examples to show them that the way to achieve their long term goals as well as popularity might not be diverging.

Thus, young people are not at an age to understand the implications of their actions. If teachers and parents could guide them towards the right path, they will be surely able to see the bigger picture and focus their energy accordingly.

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Average: 5.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, lastly, may, so, thus, well, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 374.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89037433155 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61813725452 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 215.323595506 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545454545455 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2902462053 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.45 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193208359253 0.243740707755 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527157297027 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502385899828 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101113205181 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346726633407 0.0667264976115 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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