The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart illustrates how the percentage of Australian male and female who did activity regularly varied between the age 15 to 65 and over in 2010.

Overall, it can be seen that the average figure was approximately 47 in all groups. Also, the biggest figure in male group was 15 to 24 at 52.8. On the other hand, the number of 25 to 34, 35 to 44 were lower than others relatively and it began to increase from the age 45. The lowest figure was 35 to 44 at 39.5 in male group.

Meanwhile, the case of female was different, compared with male group. Generally, the percentage of middle age accounted for the top number. Firstly, the top figure in female group was 45 to 54 at 53.3. In contrast, 65 and over of age group have taken the lowest figure at 47.1

In conclusion, in female group, middle age women did physical activity frequently. While, young people did activity often in the male group.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...women did physical activity frequently. While, young people did activity often in the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, so, while, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 749.0 965.302439024 78% => OK
No of words: 167.0 196.424390244 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48502994012 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.59483629437 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46471022937 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550898203593 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 232.2 283.868780488 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1086497599 43.030603864 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.625 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.25 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195416163082 0.215688989381 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911197084316 0.103423049105 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.084746544602 0.0843802449381 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156907634586 0.15604864568 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0991769470601 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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