The bar chart blow shows the percentage of Australian men and women in differrent groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Essay topics:

The bar chart blow shows the percentage of Australian men and women in differrent groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart compares the percentage of male and female in Australia in six distinct age groups who took part in regular physical exercises in 2010.

It is clear that Australian men exercised more when they got older while their female counterparts lost their interest in such activities over the same period of time.

Men aged 15-24 spent the biggest proportions on exercises at 52.8 percents. The figures then declined to only 39.5 percents for 35-44 age group before gradually increased into 46.2 percents, which was the lowest figures of group aged 65 and above.

The majority of women, on the other hand, showed great interest in physical activities. while only 47.7 percents of female aged 15-24 involved in physical sports, the figures for other older groups saw a gradual rise and peaked at 53.3 percents, which was the figures for women in their middle-forties to early fifties. only 47.1 percents of female aged 65 and above considered doing exercises on a regular basic

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...terest in such activities over the same period of time. Men aged 15-24 spent the biggest ...
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Line 13, column 89, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
... great interest in physical activities. while only 47.7 percents of female aged 15-24...
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Line 13, column 321, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Only
... their middle-forties to early fifties. only 47.1 percents of female aged 65 and abo...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 836.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 164.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09756097561 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57858190836 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50955194837 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609756097561 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.6183796553 43.030603864 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.428571429 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216450398599 0.215688989381 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104682528561 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0911173439335 0.0843802449381 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142419988566 0.15604864568 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.099638778401 0.0819641961636 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.2329268293 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 61.2550243902 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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