The chart below gives information about the science qualifications held by people in two countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The chart below gives information about the science qualifications held by people in two countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the percentage of people with different science qualification and without any science qualification in Malaysia and Singapore.

First of all, it should be noted that a large number of people in Malaysia do not have any qualification in science. In fact, almost 65% of people are without any science degree. Also, about 35 % of Malaysian could only hold a school-leaving qualification. Furthermore, 10% of Malaysian have got a bachelor's degree, and almost 3% have obtained a master's degree, which is the lowest percentage of people in Malaysia.

Second, the highest number of people in Singapore, which are 60% of people could not achieve any science qualification. Moreover, 30% of these people have only finished school. About the bachelor's degree, Singapore people have completed more degrees than Malaysians. In fact, 20% of people have completed the bachelor's degree, and almost 3 % have completed a master's degree.

In general, it worth noting that most of the people in the two countries could not hold any science qualification. However, many people could finish school and achieve a school-leaving qualification. There are few people with high science qualification, such as bachelors and masters in both countries.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 39, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... First of all, it should be noted that a large number of people in Malaysia do not have any qual...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, in fact, in general, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 1.00243902439 499% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 3.97073170732 378% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1058.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42564102564 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15111105627 2.65546596893 119% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476923076923 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 319.5 283.868780488 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.023486177 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1666666667 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 5.23603664747 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146466079853 0.215688989381 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070449712966 0.103423049105 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443756322102 0.0843802449381 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116822081841 0.15604864568 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408354134622 0.0819641961636 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 11.4140731707 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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