The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

Essay topics:

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.

The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

There are two information sources, one of them is in the form of table which represents number of U.K residents visiting abroad for various reasons, the other source of information is bar graph which shows that where they travelled.

The table comprises of summary of travel data of four years starting from 1994 to 1998 . It has been observed that in that entire duration resident of U.K love to spend holidays outside country than any other reasons. In year 1994 out of 22,072 people who travelled outside U.K 15,246 travelled only to spend holidays, followed by business , visits to friends and relatives and other reasons. Out of these most of the people love to travel to western Europe, when compared to North America and other areas. This trend continued till 1998.

However there is a decrease in the number of people spending holidays in year 1995 when compared to year 1994 and increase in the number of people travelling for business by small amount then too the people going outside of U.K for holidays remains at the top for the year.

As per the information depicted in table highest number of people travelled in year 1998 and more that half of them travelled for holiday purpose. Their were 28,828 travellers in 1998 and about 20,700 travelled only for the purpose to spend vacation.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 33.7804878049 127% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 965.302439024 113% => OK
No of words: 223.0 196.424390244 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88789237668 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37628613649 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547085201794 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 318.6 283.868780488 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.2489400649 43.030603864 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.111111111 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7777777778 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.88888888889 5.23603664747 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191588577656 0.215688989381 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814121980055 0.103423049105 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0480750696352 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124543861776 0.15604864568 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221752911556 0.0819641961636 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.2329268293 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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