The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams illustrate the information about the current town centre of Islip and its future modification plan.
Overall, the Islip town centre is expected to develop from a rural area to an urban place. Some modernised public facilities are planned to be constructed in the future.
To be more specific, the shops which are located in the central part of the town centre will remain the same. Likewise, the housing area situated in the South also will keep its place with the construction of some new houses, and the school in the Southwest of the town will slightly expand its size after the renovation.
On the other hand, the new town centre will be surrounded by a dual carriageway. The old main road will be converted as a pedestrian way. Shops located in the North side of the centre is expected to be demolished as a bus station, a shopping centre, a car park and some new houses will be built in that area. Moreover, the park located in the Southeast corner will shrink its size after refurbishment.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
'countryside' is lost. countryside is an area, not for the map. read a sample:
https://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-i-ielts-academic-essays/maps…
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 178 200
No. of Characters: 812 1000
No. of Different Words: 96 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.653 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.562 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.546 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 51 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 35 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.879 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.422 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.672 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.091 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, likewise, moreover, so, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 1.00243902439 698% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 837.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70224719101 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64160266473 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544943820225 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 260.1 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3835326249 43.030603864 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7777777778 22.9334400587 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.23603664747 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143570167878 0.215688989381 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728926287161 0.103423049105 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585899378307 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118481742706 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637110438219 0.0819641961636 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 11.4140731707 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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