The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and mak

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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart shows the factors that contribute to land degradation while the table categorizes the causes by region.

From the pie chart, it can be seen that the major criterion that makes the land less productive is over-grazing contributing 35% of the total effect which is followed by deforestation. Destructions of forests impart the second-largest impact on land degradation with a percentage of 30% of the total damage while over-cultivation takes third place in this phenomenon of making soil barren with a fraction of impact of 28 out of 100. Rest 7% is covered by other criteria combined.

The table depicts the condition of land degradation in Three regions: North America, Europe, and Oceania. Europe is mostly hit by deforestation while in other regions the decimation of trees poses a comparatively lower threat. The same is true for excessive cultivation in Europe causing 7.7% of the total damage. North America faces a 3.3% loss in land productivity due to

an excess amount of cultivation, however, in Oceania it seems to be benign. Though Oceania is free from damage done by over-production of crops it takes a huge toll due to herding at an excessive rate. Finally,the last portion of the table tells us that about more than one-fifth of Europe's total land has been damaged and the negative effects are relatively low in the case of North America and Oceania.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: An
...3.3% loss in land productivity due to an excess amount of cultivation, however, ...
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Line 13, column 77, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ever, in Oceania it seems to be benign. Though Oceania is free from damage done by ove...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...to herding at an excessive rate. Finally,the last portion of the table tells us that...
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Line 13, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lls us that about more than one-fifth of Europes total land has been damaged and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, second, so, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 33.7804878049 124% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 3.97073170732 327% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1164.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 231.0 196.424390244 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03896103896 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01126984953 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 106.607317073 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601731601732 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 369.0 283.868780488 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0392719439 43.030603864 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.4 112.824112599 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.23603664747 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.13902439024 527% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.121123409461 0.215688989381 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553373531137 0.103423049105 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0728988808458 0.0843802449381 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104098052432 0.15604864568 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090756267997 0.0819641961636 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.2329268293 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 61.2550243902 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.3012195122 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 40.7170731707 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.4329268293 131% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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