The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

Online retail sales in New Zealand - 2003 and 2013

Online Retail sales in New Zealand

The given pie charts demonstrate online shopping rate for retail business in New Zealand both in 2003 and 2013.
In 2003, Online travel service ratio was at high level. Almost two-third part covered by it. Instead of it, books sell in very low portion, which was at 19%. Files/Music was at slightly less than quarter portion in 2003. People bought same amount of cloths using internet and mobile applications. Rate of buying cloths and travelling tickets online was comparatively declined in 2013.Both are at 16% and 29% respectively. People were highly interested to buy Film/movie online. They accounted for one-third of online retail sales in 2013 while a number of 2003's film/music sales was less than one-fourth of total online sales. Almost one part from three covered by it. Similarly online books sales rose by 3% from the initial ratio of 19%.
Overall, it is easy shown that ratio of books’ and films/movies’ buyers increased. Contrary, selling of cloths and travel declined.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 385, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Both
...line was comparatively declined in 2013.Both are at 16% and 29% respectively. People...
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Line 2, column 670, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...most one part from three covered by it. Similarly online books sales rose by 3% from the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
similarly, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 841.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 162.0 196.424390244 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19135802469 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56762134501 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77668016723 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 245.7 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.4926829268 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.6204640457 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.6923076923 112.824112599 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.4615384615 22.9334400587 54% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.76923076923 5.23603664747 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180153354418 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603579866342 0.103423049105 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807785373642 0.0843802449381 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141101233542 0.15604864568 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118052064272 0.0819641961636 144% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.93 11.4140731707 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 11.4329268293 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.9970731707 62% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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