The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show the online sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The visual presents the data for the goods sold via Internet for the retail particularly in New Zealand for the years 2003 and 2013. The figures given shows total four sectors including travel, film/music, books and clothes. Biggest change from 2003 to 2013, was in the travel and film/music category, where travel as the biggest industry in 2003 was replaced with film and music in 2013.
Firstly, least sales were done with the books in 2003, 19% totally, and sales went to 22% in 2013, rating books as third best selling in 2013. Secondly, film/music increased in sales by 12%, ending up in 2013 as the best sector for 2013.
Thirdly, clothes experienced biggest decrease in percentage, dropping 8 percent from 24% to 16%. Additionally, this sector was worst among other four.
Finally, travel industry dropped from first to second selling sector in 2013.
To sum up, two biggest sales industries accounting for approximately 60% of sales were travel and clothes. However, in 20133 film/music increase in sale lead that sector to be biggest in 2013.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Biggest'.
Suggestion: The Biggest
... travel, film/music, books and clothes. Biggest change from 2003 to 2013, was in the tr...
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Line 3, column 18, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'experienced the biggest'.
Suggestion: experienced the biggest
...est sector for 2013. Thirdly, clothes experienced biggest decrease in percentage, dropping 8 perc...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 883.0 965.302439024 91% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01704545455 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49399459487 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579545454545 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 237.6 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2040061531 43.030603864 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1 5.23603664747 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226338083899 0.215688989381 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974265662045 0.103423049105 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0598634133953 0.0843802449381 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120689056267 0.15604864568 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657845606821 0.0819641961636 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 11.4140731707 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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