Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cell phone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
Technologically advanced devices that people use daily are used to track their personal actions and information. Most of technology users do not think about how they can be spied continuously. Some of the benefits of technology such as Internet, smartphones and laptops became objects that are used to hack personal information from their users. Today, there is more privacy breach than ever and people are not aware how technology can ruin their life.
Firstly, there is rapid increase in number of users of technology device miracles. Although people read in the news about hacker attacks, they don’t think that can happen to them. In addition, credit cards and bank accounts are linked and stored on smartphone devices, so people funds are also prone to hacking.
Furthermore, leak of information can destroy private life and business or political career. For example, the website WikiLeaks went online and made public very important documents about fraud in the last presidential elections in USA. Thus, a very high positioned politician got sentenced and ended in a prison.
Finally, people become obsessed with the Internet and being online. Even though many useful information and materials can be looked up online, all of our search history is tracked and used to bombard us back with ads. Consequently, we spend more money and time online. In fact, technology is the reason our personal information can be found online and tracked by international corporations, government and hackers. Our aim should be to be very careful with revealing our data online.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...out how they can be spied continuously. Some of the benefits of technology such as Internet...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, so, thus, for example, in addition, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1328.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 252.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26984126984 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98428260373 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78347488336 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.638888888889 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 422.1 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.555183919 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5333333333 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226499598627 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0724760064037 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521447801218 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118493866474 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611396299256 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.99 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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