05.10.2017
The company you work for has decided to close the cafeteria as staff are not using it much. You are unhappy about it. Write a letter to the supervisor / director (someone in authority)
- Asking not to close it
- Inform what feel is the cause of staff not using it.
- How can things be improved in the cafeteria.
Dear Mr. Smith
I work as an accountant in your firm and from a recent e-mail, I learned about closing the cafeteria due to its unpopularity. I am writing in a hope that the management may rethink the decision. In fact, the staff need have the cafe because only a small number of employees take home-made meals with them and the rest of the staff do not eat anything while being in the workplace. This situation has an adverse effect on their health and at least half of colleagues have issues with their stomachs.
It appears people avoid the local cafeteria because the meals served are tasteless at best and look terrible. Moreover, a large proportion of personnel are vegetarians who cannot eat meat, eggs and fish; thus, the absence of wholesome, healthy vegetarian options deters them from visiting the café.
The troublesome situation may be addressed if the place has a new menu with vegetables, fruits and dairy products such as fatless yogurts. Hiring new staff for the kitchen of the café will have a benevolent influence on the quality of food and constant monitoring of cooked meals will prevent the repetition of the problem.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The troublesome situation may be addressed if the place has a new menu with vegetables, fruits and dairy products such as fatless yogurts.
Error: fatless Suggestion: ?
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 8.0 out of 9
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 200 250
No. of Characters: 954 1200
No. of Different Words: 135 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.761 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.77 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.555 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 65 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 51 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 34 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.368 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.714 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...e staff need have the cafe because only a small number of employees take home-made meals with the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, while, at least, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 32.9175257732 39% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 26.3917525773 91% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 994.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.0 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64822582119 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.67 0.622605031667 108% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 0.824742268041 485% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.406005913 44.8134815571 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.444444444 76.5299724578 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 16.8248392259 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 4.34317383033 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0836485131679 0.216113520407 39% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0304162690628 0.0766984524023 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042138175623 0.0603063233224 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0486306121243 0.12726935374 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038994681514 0.0580467560999 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 8.37731958763 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 70.7449484536 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 7.45979381443 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 8.71597938144 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 7.59969072165 117% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 41.2886597938 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.