The company you’re working offers funds and required things to the groups of local community every year. Write a letter to the director of your company to recommend a group in your local community which deserves help.In your letter, you should:•descri

Essay topics:

The company you’re working offers funds and required things to the groups of local community every year. Write a letter to the director of your company to recommend a group in your local community which deserves help.

In your letter, you should:

• describle what the group is

• say how your company funds can help them

• explain why helping them is a good idea.

Dear Sir,

My name is Mona Kapadia, and I am writing this letter to recommend a local community group of my area, who helps underprivileged children. The name of the local community group is “Talent Group”, and they help children who have a flair in sports. In the past, this group has supported many children’s team by sponsoring fees for the coach, providing sports equipment’s and clothing.

Currently, they are supporting a group of slum children who are passionate about Cricket. These children till date, have won 3 local Cricket accolades and are now practicing for Ranji Trophy 2019. Our funds will help them to hire a professional coach, who will help them to sharpen their skills and elevate their chances of winning the Ranji Trophy. Additionally, with the funds they can also purchase better quality Cricket gears that are used by professional players.

I think it would be great opportunity for us to advertise and create awareness of our products range, if our company decides to offer funds to the “Talent Group”. As you are aware, Cricket in India is not a game but a religion, and many local enthusiasts will come to watch the Ranji Trophy 2019 match in the stadium. We can distribute pamphlets, set up standees and even distribute free samples of our products to the spectators. I am sure that this initiative will increase our products awareness among locals and thereafter increase the sale and revenue of our company.

I hope that the management will consider my recommendation. I await your response.

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se the sale and revenue of our company. I hope that the management will consider...
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Line 9, column 61, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...gement will consider my recommendation. I await your response.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 4.92783505155 162% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 5.05154639175 218% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 26.3917525773 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1307.0 937.175257732 139% => OK
No of words: 257.0 206.0 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08560311284 4.54256449028 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01926972032 2.54303337028 119% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583657587549 0.622605031667 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 396.9 290.88556701 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.13402061856 109% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.463917525773 647% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5432050939 44.8134815571 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.538461538 76.5299724578 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7692307692 16.8248392259 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.46153846154 4.34317383033 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 7.41237113402 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236598758481 0.216113520407 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793116850971 0.0766984524023 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718031705516 0.0603063233224 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125364378809 0.12726935374 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720099154178 0.0580467560999 124% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 8.71597938144 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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