During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter:

Essay topics:

During a recent plane journey, you sat next to a businessman who owns a chain of restaurants. You talked to him and he suggested that you should contact him about a possible job in one of his restaurants.Write a letter to this businessman. In your letter: Remind him when and where you met,Tell him what kind of job you are interested in, Say why you think you would be suitable for the job

Dear Mr. Brown,

I’m writing to remind you about our recent meeting on a plane last Saturday when we were flying from Moscow to London together. If you can remember I’m Olga, the woman who sat next to you. We were talking about your chain of restaurants during our flight and you suggested that I contact you about a possible job in some of your restaurants.

I’m very grateful for your suggestion. I would like to let you know that I’m extremely interested in the restaurant business and I sometimes think about working in this sphere. Unfortunately, I don’t have the appropriate education to be a chef or cook, but I do have one in management. If you need a personal assistant or administrator I would be very happy to work in this area.

You may be interested to know that I have a diploma in management. At my current work I have a lot of responsibility and I can organize and manage people’s work. I have excellent communication skills. I’m also fond of the restaurant business and I also study it as a hobby.

Please don’t hesitate to contact me if you have any further questions. I would be very encouraged to give you any additional information. Thank you in advance for your consideration

Best wishes,
Olga

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nk you in advance for your consideration Best wishes, Olga
^^^^^
Line 11, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for your consideration Best wishes, Olga
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, mind you, talking about, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 32.9175257732 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1058.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 218.0 206.0 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85321100917 4.54256449028 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84250218741 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05726288128 2.54303337028 120% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 127.690721649 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573394495413 0.622605031667 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 337.5 290.88556701 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 16.3608247423 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.340580005 44.8134815571 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5714285714 76.5299724578 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5714285714 16.8248392259 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07142857143 4.34317383033 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 7.41237113402 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27269647859 0.216113520407 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0978292956073 0.0766984524023 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10402594094 0.0603063233224 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172858882855 0.12726935374 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129732991406 0.0580467560999 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 7.45979381443 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 8.71597938144 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 7.59969072165 98% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 41.2886597938 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 8.54432989691 94% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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