A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money
Dear Sir,
I hope this letter finds you well. Recently, I had an opportunity to go through the brochure, which was being distributed in our society regarding range of events planned by your organisation. Moreover, it had also asked people to give their opinion regarding different options. Both choices have their own advantages and disadvantages.
Let me explain you in detail. As, arranging concerts will provide public with an opportunity to interact with each other. Moreover, this will also help to children to meet their superstar idols. While on the other hand, sponsoring a sports team will prove beneficial in long run, it might prove to be helpful for young generation and develop new players. Furthermore, this could turn out to be beneficial for Country's football team as well, as players can get facilitated with state of art learning techniques and coaches.
However, decision is entirely based on majority, but I believe it would be better to sponsor a football team, as it will develop interest of different people towards sports activities. Therefore, if your organisation decides with sponsoring a football, that would be better.
Regards
Alan
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Dear Sir, I hope this letter finds you well. Recen...
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...ages. Let me explain you in detail. As, arranging concerts will provide public...
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...of art learning techniques and coaches. However, decision is entirely based on m...
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...tball, that would be better. Regards Alan
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.03092783505 66% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 32.9175257732 61% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 991.0 937.175257732 106% => OK
No of words: 187.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29946524064 4.54256449028 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86698850621 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 127.690721649 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.700534759358 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 296.1 290.88556701 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6804123711 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 16.3608247423 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7415645455 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0909090909 76.5299724578 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 16.8248392259 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 4.34317383033 216% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 2.54639175258 157% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118100149841 0.216113520407 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0364457886163 0.0766984524023 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342361796618 0.0603063233224 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.074568774859 0.12726935374 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298401379094 0.0580467560999 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 8.37731958763 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 70.7449484536 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 8.71597938144 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 7.59969072165 114% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 41.2886597938 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 8.62886597938 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 8.54432989691 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 8.15463917526 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.