A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.
Write a letter to the company. In your letter
describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team
summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts
say how you think the company should spend the money
Dear Sir or Madam,
I had heard that your organisation has come up to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. I am writing to you with regards to this to give my feedback for the same.
Sponsoring the sports team has many advantages. It gives a lot of support to the team and helps them perform well in the competetion. Besides this it also encourages other young people to take active participation in sports. The company can promote their products on the teams appearls and also do marketing during the tournaments.
Concerts are mostly preferred by the youth. So the company can target the youth during this time. It can help the company's popularity to grow among the younger generation.
I believe, sports is familiar with all kinds of people across the country and it will be very wise for the company to invest their money on sponsoring a sports team than paying for open-air concerts. It not only benefits the organisation but also helps the children to excel in sports and bring pride to the nation.
Yours sincerely,
Jack.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Besides,
...s them perform well in the competetion. Besides this it also encourages other young peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.48453608247 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 5.05154639175 139% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 32.9175257732 58% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 26.3917525773 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 944.0 937.175257732 101% => OK
No of words: 198.0 206.0 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76767676768 4.54256449028 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75116612262 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57870696657 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 127.690721649 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621212121212 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 280.8 290.88556701 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8928248701 44.8134815571 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.6666666667 76.5299724578 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 16.8248392259 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 4.34317383033 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 7.41237113402 121% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394563910452 0.216113520407 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10950428857 0.0766984524023 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155272983771 0.0603063233224 257% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229292709132 0.12726935374 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.199841281776 0.0580467560999 344% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 8.37731958763 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 70.7449484536 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 7.45979381443 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 7.59969072165 100% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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