A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter
Describe a benefits of sponsoring the sports team
Summarize the benefits of paying for concerts
Say how you think the company should spend the money
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing a letter to send my feedback about company’s sponsoring. Sponsoring sports team have numerous benefits. Firstly, since your main purpose is children, there are vast number of population might be included. Thus, your company can take full advantage of money that you have spent. In addition, it is more likely to develop your reputation. Secondly, sports are the interesting field that children have chosen. Therefore, your company can benefit from these issue.
I would like to mention that paying for open-air concerts is beneficial. The main reason is that most people are fan of concerts and they spend a sizable amount of money on concerts. Consequently, most people can see your advertisement. Another thing is that open-air concerts are took place in different areas. Therefore, your company could be recognized by various people.
I think it would be better, if you spend your money on sports team because children play a vital role in society. I hope you find it useful.
Yours sincerely,
Bahare Past
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 281, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...her thing is that open-air concerts are took place in different areas. Therefore, yo...
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Line 4, column 56, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...d be better, if you spend your money on sports team because children play a vital role...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, another thing, i think, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 5.05154639175 20% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.03092783505 165% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 32.9175257732 79% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 26.3917525773 68% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 879.0 937.175257732 94% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17058823529 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72169929618 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.658823529412 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 290.88556701 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 16.3608247423 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.2361293035 44.8134815571 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 58.6 76.5299724578 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.3333333333 16.8248392259 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 4.34317383033 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.29896907216 70% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 7.41237113402 148% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.94845360825 101% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309118817861 0.216113520407 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0880642007271 0.0766984524023 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543589348266 0.0603063233224 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184576817327 0.12726935374 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0532508776666 0.0580467560999 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 8.37731958763 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 70.7449484536 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.52 8.71597938144 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 8.62886597938 58% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 8.54432989691 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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