Write a letter to your manager about your work from last year Include What you did What you think you could improve A training request

Essay topics:

Write a letter to your manager about your work from last year. Include

What you did
What you think you could improve
A training request

Dear John,
This letter is a write up encapsulating my work and achievements for the calendar year 2019.
I would like to bring to your notice about the successful launch of my team’s pilot project in partnership with our client SYNTEL. Besides this, I was also associated with 2 other projects and spearheaded the metric change across the organization which resulted in 20% revenue growth.
That being said, I was unable to put across my points to the management due to my lack of technical knowledge. I have made it my primary objective this year to have a working knowledge of storage servers and its impact on the cost of yearly maintenance.
Therefore, I request I work as an understudy for next 2 months with the technical director so that I could learn , understand and improve my knowledge in one of crucial segments in the industry.
I appreciate your consideration on this front and look forward to hearing about your thoughts on my work from last year.
Yours faithfully,
Mihira

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 16, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
Dear John, This letter is a write up encapsulating my work and achievemen...
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Line 3, column 78, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...about the successful launch of my team’s pilot project in partnership with our cl...
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Line 4, column 147, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dge. I have made it my primary objective this year to have a working knowledge of...
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Line 5, column 113, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...technical director so that I could learn , understand and improve my knowledge in ...
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Line 8, column 7, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...om last year. Yours faithfully, Mihira
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, look, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 831.0 937.175257732 89% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88823529412 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88030545291 2.54303337028 113% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 127.690721649 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664705882353 0.622605031667 107% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 290.88556701 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.5295233887 44.8134815571 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.875 76.5299724578 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 16.8248392259 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 4.34317383033 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186111511481 0.216113520407 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087212914102 0.0766984524023 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670245467347 0.0603063233224 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107959702773 0.12726935374 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0683001376215 0.0580467560999 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 8.37731958763 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 70.7449484536 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 8.71597938144 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 41.2886597938 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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